toppa' the list. Relatively short and simple. Interested to see if it's worth making an image for and posting.
Interesting concept - a couple of thoughts:
- The new container after revised procedures - is steel really sensible for an electrical storm? Seems like they should be looking into a tough insulating material.
- How is it recontained? Seems a rather nebulous thing to try and get back in the bottle after it's loose and I don't think you mention it.
- "Humans or animals touching this substance has resulted in [DATA EXPUNGED]" - feels a bit of a cop-out; surely we're simply talking about electrocution? If you mean for there to be some more sensitive aspect (e.g. communication with a sentient entity) then [DATA EXPUNGED] makes sense, but would need to be hinted at elsewhere.
- "Should the container holding SCP-XXX be broken, then [DATA EXPUNGED]" - [DATA EXPUNGED], as opposed to blackbox redaction, implies the Foundation has removed the data from its own archives as it's too dangerous for people to see. However, you do explain what happens if the container is broken in the incident report (albeit with its own redaction, which seems unnecessary).
http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-853 sorry dude.