I'll rework the problems with the grammar and spelling you've pointed out.
"not sure what you're getting at with this; do you mean that it's unclear whether the reanimated corpse is genuinely the dead person or some other intelligence masquerading as them? You seem to come down on the side of the former in the later article."
-I threw this in after the previous comment. Felt like I didn't add enough explanation. If it stands alone, perhaps I should leave this commentary out.
-I'll reexamine this. But I really do want to establish the difference in the dormant and active states.
Threat of termination for theft
-I hear you. The idea was that, for whatever reason, a researcher had tried to steal a disk (the details are the first expunged addendum). The results of this are the inspection procedures explained in the addendum and the containment procedures. Perhaps I should leave out the threat of termination out?
3 gram baseline
-the discovery that each additional subject revived with a disk adds to the weight gain of the box by .5 grams AND the discovery of the 3 gram baseline when all subjects in Foundation control are terminated was supposed to suggest that there are 6 people out there with coins in their heads. Should I rewrite this for clarity, or just remove it?
"Whether this is [REDACTED] unverified."
-an instance of unnecessary redaction? Uncensored it should read: "Whether this is an automated defensive reaction to our tests or some conscious act of subversion on the part of SCP-XXXX is currently unverified."
"[DATA EXPUNGED]" - is this the gamma ray burst?
-Yeah, this is the incident report of the unanticipated gamma burst. I`ll write it up and add it.
I like the concept, though perhaps the hook needs to be further developed. What we have (if I've been reading correctly) is a resurrection machine that becomes increasingly dangerous the more times it is used, with no take-backs, with the result that the Foundation is aggressively trying to stop it being used further.
-This could very well be one of the theories. One of the big criticisms was that my original idea was a self explanatory tool. You do X (use coin on dead body), it does Y (it resurrects dead body). My intent with this pass is…the resurrection is a byproduct of what the skip does. It`s purpose is not TO resurrect dead people. This is just something that happens while its thing.