I'd like to thank Rhett for helping me with this. That disection of the original draft helped so much. What do you guys think?
Myself, I enjoy this. The idea of living art may be over done, graffiti in specific, but I always enjoy them. I can't find any severe errors, but I'm sure when this post gets more attention, you'll be drowning in criticism.
Also, you may want to go see SCP-700, if you haven't already. http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-700