SCP-XXXX is to be stored in a three (3) by three (3) by four (4) meter cement cell
I suppose you're right. This is a carry over from previous drafts. It could now stay in a storage locker without problem.
within a steel footlocker secured by an electronic lock.
Ah-ha. Thank you for catching this. In the How to Write an SCP guide, it specifically warns against things like this.
access to SCP-XXXX requires written approval from two (2) Level 4 personnel, 24 hours in advance
I'd hoped the incident report implied a theft of one of the SCP-XXXX-2 disks. Security would have been tightened as a result.
SCP-XXXX-1 appears to be a hinged wooden box with an ivy design across the lid
SCP-XXXX-2 are metal disks with a diameter of 36 mm and weigh 31 gm
Again, thank you for catching this. And yes, I had hoped to imply that there are doubts regarding SCP-XXXX-1 being a box.
SCP-XXXX-2 dissolve into ash after 17 days of removal from SCP-XXXX-1
Again, a hold over from previous drafts. I'll chose my words more carefully.
SCP-XXXX has demonstrated resurrection like abilities.
This is something I've had concerns about as well. Throughout the text I keep switching from 'resurrected', 'revived' and 'resuscitated'. I'm not sure what I should be using here, so I've been using everything else as a placeholder. Do you have any suggestions as to what I should use? Perhaps it's just me, but 'reanimated' has connotations for this skip that I don't want.
Instances of dimensional gain in SCP-XXXX-1 are followed by it emitting what is thought to be some type of data transmission
Again, another one of my big struggles. I tried dancing around the issue (poorly), so I tried coming right out and saying it. The idea is that it is transmitting information. I'll defiantly focus on this, but I've had problems explaining it. Any suggestions?
Current rate of weight gain suggests there are six (6) unknown subjects which are not in Foundation custody.
Possibly an example of me removing too much from a previous draft. The rate of gain is stated to be 0.5 grams/day for every revivee in the second paragraph of the description. I'd tried explaining how the Foundation came to the conclusion through testing, concluding that based off of the established figure above, the termination of all subjects leaves the skip with a baseline gain that could suggest an additional number of subjects out in the world. Explaining all of it took up waaaaaay too much space, so I removed it and hoped the figure would suggest that the Foundation could make an educated guess as to how many other subjects are out there. Unless I can think of a succinct way to say all this, I'll change 'are' to 'may be' for now.
Further to this, active SCP-XXXX-2 emit what is thought to be a strong radio signal once every 24 hours.
It is a radio signal. But the Foundation is not supposed to be able to make sense of the radio signal. I'll try and convey this.
. SCP-XXXX-2 become active upon contact with a human corpse, passing through the body into the cranial cavity.
The method of the skip's ability to move into and through a human corpse are meant to be unknown. I'd actually said this, but I must have deleted it by mistake. Thank you.
enlarging the axon in neurons to twice their size
I…honestly did not think of this.
Dr. ████ was discovered to have [REDACTED].
The implication is that the doctor stole an SCP-XXXX-2 disk and resurrected a loved one. The details of the theft would not be readily available for all to see. I'm kind of attached to this, but I can let it go if the consensus is that the incident doesn't help the article.
Attention: Due to the events of [REDACTED], all staff will now be subject to inspection upon leaving the SCP-XXXX cell.
Consequences of the theft by Dr. ████, with the memo reflected in the containment procedures at the top of the page. This goes to the issue of whether the incident helps the article at all.
Thank you for the detailed feedback. I'm going to make some revisions and think of some solutions to what you've pointed out.