This is what I've been working on. One's a new SCP item and the other is a joke tale. Any comments and critiques are welcome. Thanks.
I'll tighten up the area you've pointed out, make them clearer. Thanks for that.
Regarding the hook for Jenny…I really thought I had one. When people say 'not enough of a hook', are they saying that there's not enough interesting about it, or something more specific?
Thanks for the feedback.
SCP-I'm almost positive we have a barber's chair that is like this, but infinitely more interesting since it was actually a honey trap.
Tale-I still hate this tale, both the idea and execution.