This is my first attempt at an SCP.
Give me all the criticisms you can muster. I'm a big boy, I can take it.
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Holy wall of text. Here we go, comments made as I read.
Basically, tone could use work, and the effects as a whole are a little iffy because it's vague. Also, some of the logs seem extraneous, and I'm not entirely sure what this thing does except say random things and make people go crazy.
Apologies if I'm overly nitpicky and/or sound irritable.
(And now for some less-useful advice.)
Seems a little pointless to me. Not the article so much as the actions of the SCP. It certainly appears very deliberate, but I can't figure out any logical motivation behind what it does. I'm sure you do have one, but it's not coming across. On the other hand, at least it's not playing the Moloch Ploy, which is a bit of a cliché at this point.
Um, digression. I like the concept, but I don't really see the point. My opinion of the article is still overall positive, so, uh, yeah, Yes.
I confess I don't know what Moloch Ploy refers to.
Admittedly, the reader not being able to figure out the logical motivation was part of my intentions. It clearly does something, and it is clearly understandable to someone, but there just isn't any sense to be made of what or why. I was sort of going off of "trigger phrases," that spy novel idea that someone could be programmed to respond in a certain way to a certain innocuous phrase. I wanted to avoid cheesy sounding "The fox is among the chickens," spy speak, and I wanted to avoid "Oh we traced the signal and it's some crazy asshole in Russia who still thinks we're in the cold war," but I think I lost some of the original idea in that effort.