Screw this, I'm scrapping my draft. I don't think it'll work.
You've got a tense shift between the first two sentences. Not a good sign.
As for the rest of it, your prose could use a lot of work. It's pretty simplistic, and lacks a good narrative voice. The result of the story is just sorta "eh, whatever".
I've actually seen almost the exact same story told before in the form of an animated short film, though it didn't involve the Foundation and the boy wasn't a pick-pocket rogue. You didn't manage to add anything of real interest to it. Try using a little imagination.