Hello. I have written a draft and I would like to know what you think about it, if that isn't too much of a hassle.
Thanks for your time.
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We already have King Arthur's sword, and it doesn't cause random earthquakes, poor spelling and grammar, random capitalization, and rampant misuse of "the subject".
Also, either that collapsible doesn't go with that draft, or you just took a hard left turn into WTFVille.
I wasn't familiar with 1777, which does shares a similar concept. I'll work harder when addressing the issues related to the execution.
The last collapsible wasn't misplaced, but apparently also wasn't introduced in a manner effective enough to imply what I intended initially either.
Regardless, thanks for your insight.
I don't think this would be at all interesting without the collapsible. As it is, I can sort of see the rough idea you're trying to go for and I do like it, however you need to solidify the link between the main article and the collapsible. Make it so that one element can't survive without the other, you know? After all, the main article is dull without the collapsible, and the collapsible makes no sense without the main article.
Other than that, listen to Smapti.
Acknowledged. As soon as I have addressed the issues pointed out by Smapti, I'll expand both the report and the main article in order to make the connection between both explicit, as I really can see now how they look like unrelated things in their current state.
Thanks for the feedback!