I still like the concept, but I just can't see the ship being able to sustain itself without any humanoid things acting as crew. I get that it has a mind of it's own, but it still has no hands to operate systems like harpoons, refueling the engine, all kind of other actions meant to be performed by humans on a real ship.
It's time once again for Draft Reviews with Ihpkmn!
I… can't find any really big gripes against this! It's pretty well-written, and there's enough whale body horror here to make you think that the guys from Whale Wars have a point.
…speaking of which, if this goes up, someone should write a tale about Greenpeace or some other environmental organization finding this and trying to protest it,only to be [DATA EXPUNGED]. But that's beside the point.
• Add a "crew" created from scrap-metal skeletons overlaid with whale muscle.
• More details on the whale guts/equipment biomechanical bits.
• It can use parts from non-whale species if it needs to. It prefers whales, and killing whales, this just lets the foundation "feed" it.
• Have the foundation "feeding" it by sending out rafts with tanks of fuel oil and raw meat into Site-412 Harbor.
• Add a log from Mobile Task Force Zeta-4 during the attack, or an exploration log.
• It has places on its hull where identifying numbers or nameplates could have formerly been attached. That is to say, it has holes in the hull plating where it looks like identifying plates where ripped off.
• Alternately, it has a nameplate. [DATA EXPUNGED] reported missing in BLACKBOX. This was a normal ship once. Something changed it.
• Make the Addendum into an interview via a foundation staff member managing to get a Morse code code-book in time, and trying to question it.
Also, I agree with Ihpkmn, such a Tale could be pretty interesting.
I think an exploration log would simply come out as a pale shadow of SCP-455; which kind of has the monopoly on Task Force Descends into Boat Full of Crazy™.
I still think an exploration log could be interesting. Mostly because there clearly was some kind of exploration, after all, the foundation knows about the inside of the ship to an extent. Possibly these could be a few twists:
• Not a sanctioned foundation expedition. An interview with one of the protesters, who attempted to climb on board to avoid drowning.
• The ship is only hostile to non-whales, if attacked, or if the borders try to get onto the bridge. If the MTF just walks around taking pictures, than the ship doesn't seem to mind. It's still somewhat difficult due to things like corridors being blocked by living whale organs, or that stepping on the arteries and wiring on the floor, hidden under a layer of rotting whale biomatter counts as an "attack."
• An attempt at an expedition. Which is repulsed by attacking hoards of SCP-xxx-2, metal skeletons made from deck railing wrapped in whale muscle for motive power. Alternately change the log so it involves the protesters trying to board the ship. This could tie in pretty well with an interview from a surviving protester.
Also, in the log you said that the wreckage of the protester's ship was dragged aboard, but how? I'm pretty sure harpoon cables, or the hull of the protester ship would break trying to lift that much weight. And a crane intended to pick up whales, even if it's made of whale vertebrae still probably would break picking up another ship.