Under the first tab. I've already gotten comparisons to SCP-1440 and Mr. Lonely, but I feel like my draft is different enough to pass. What does the community think of my draft?
Yeaaahhh… I don't really like the socially awkward depressed Jesus vibe. I think you meant to make someone that everyone completely ignored and also he was immortal for some reason? If so, why was the doctor able to ask him questions and interact with him? Also, did he die? There's no evidence to suggest the nuclear blast would have killed him, as he himself stated that he cannot die. There are too many inconsistencies in this for me to like it, sorry.
socially awkward depressed Jesus vibe
Not quite sure what you meant by this.
Anyways, this man is not completely ignored. The Foundation simply seems him as a person who cannot die or be hurt, and they treat him as such. I guess I should explain this guys back story a little bit. He did something in the past that angered some powerful being or artifact. He was cursed to forever walk the earth but the people he tried to contact would pretty much ignore what he said or did. The people he talks to hear everything he says as what would be completely normal for the conversation. If he did something dangerous or evil, they will probably cite it as chance or think that it happens on a regular basis, even if it happens to themselves.
I intentionally left it open on whether he survived the blast for two reasons. If people like this draft as it is, then they can wonder if this guy is out there or not. Is this insane man out in the world screwing things up? I just said that he was missing. Maybe he was blown to bits and is now dead, or he could be still alive and not in Foundation care. Now, if people don't like my draft, I have something planned to change it.
Sorry for the long post, and I hope that clarified some points.
Yeah… that back story is exactly the same as 1440, especially if you read Thrice. Maybe you should go with some other origin story here.
The idea seems a bit schizophrenic. It's a guy nobody notices who's also immortal and invulnerable and can also effect computers, and yet this one scientist does notice what he does for some reason and sets off a nuke he knows wouldn't work instead of a hundred and one different and saner things he could have done (if he knows about what this guy does, why can't he tell anyone else? Since he managed to document the entire thing, no real reason why he couldn't have).
See my post above for my reason on why Boyd could see him. The nuke was to stop the other SCPs that had breached containment. He didn't know whether or not the nuke would kill the man or not. Boyd, when he wrote the note, was basically sitting outside the Vault. The Vault is where they store the most precious documents at the site. He's hiding from the other more dangerous SCPs that have escaped.
I guess I should have said this in the note or something, but Boyd had already been hurt pretty badly during the beginning of the breach, so there is not much he could do. Now that I'm thinking about it, I'll go add that in.
For some reason, the song "Mr. Cellophane" keeps running through my head.
I don't know enough about Chicago to know what you're talking about. Could you please elaborate?