There's enough interesting here that I'm willing to up-vote. There a few problems (like a missing full stop or two) but you have the basics down pat— using metric, having somewhat creative containment procedures (forcing the lightswitch to stay up is something that most people wouldn't really think of), and having a fair bit of internal consistency— this line:
Although there are no lights or appliances in Boise-3283's structures, electric devices brought by exploration teams do function when plugged into power outlets in these structures.
Bugged me, until I realized: "No shit they're going to have power in a house that's under construction. They need some way to power the tools."
There's some oddness here and there too, like:
early Smith000s
I'm assuming you meant "Early 2000s". "Smith0" shows up a lot in here, actually, at least three times.
There's even some pretty good character writing:
The Foundation will be glad to know that I am still batting a perfect .000 on discovering ghosts in my career.
The dialog's even got some personality to it, which isn't something you often see in MTF Meat Grinders.
It's got a few issues, still, like [REDACTED] not being in all-caps, and redacting the end to O5 clearance is unnecssary. Could have used a bit more time on the skillet, but you can still cook it a little more (which, in this metaphor, means re-write now that it's posted). I like it enough to upvote, despite the issues I pointed out.
