I've continued to edit the scp I'm working on. Some items I'm worried about and would like advice on: the expunged at the end, short sentences, if I've used correct scientific terminology, and implausibility/plot holes. Thanks for any help you could offer!
The idea is kind of meh but workable. The real problem is the writing, which is extremely, extremely stilted.
Thanks for taking a look at it for me! I'm glad to hear the idea has at least some promise, and I admit I could use some help with my writing. But I thought the writing of an scp was supposed to be formal and a little dry. Does 'stilted' mean it's too much? Could you point out any examples, or problem areas? I hope to be able to fix it a bit. Thanks again for your help!
Y'know, I've really tried to look this over at least, like, three times over the past few days, but I can barely get past the first few paragraphs. Not because they are horrendous (though there are a few things that I would question), but because this really isn't interesting. Reading through it, it looks like you just made an insect that uses hair to hunt in special ways. That's it. I didn't really see a twist, nor anything to make this any different than the expectations I had when I read the first paragraph of the description. You play it too straight here when it needs some sort of interesting twist.
Thanks for looking it over! It is my first so I am still getting a feel for making an SCP, but it is a good point; anomalous does not make something inherently interesting. I had hoped a little body horror would help kick it over the top, but that might not be enough. Back to the drawing board.