Hey, this is my very rough draft for a un-nicknamed SCP that I've been working on. Any thoughts are appreciated.
The most immediate problem I have with this is that the "original" containment procedures are really, really silly. The original classification as "Safe" of a humanoid SCP with as of yet undetermined anomalous properties seems reckless, as does specifying "a single lock", approving daily visits by staff for fun, and the frankly bizarre suggestion that it be used to replenish D-class personnel, again without anything approaching full understanding of its properties. The addendum by Dr. P████ only serves to highlight the absurdity of the original version of the document, and not in a way that seems professional or interesting.
This stuff is unnecessary padding that's distracting and unprofessional. Without it, after some cleanup, this might work.
A handful of other notes: radiocarbon dating is only effective on organic materials (stone tables do not qualify), I think the specificity of 17 B.C.E warrants an explanation, and while all four of your [REDACTED]s are pointless, the first one is particularly egregious in light of the sentence immediately following it.
EDIT: "A small stone table roughly three meters in diameter". That's a ten-foot wide table. "Small" seems a poor choice of descriptor.
SCP-XXXX's behavior is sedate.
Sedate is not an adjective, it's a verb. At this moment, I would like to politely ask you if English is your first language.
sedate1 | sɪˈdeɪt |
calm, dignified, and unhurried: in the old days, business was carried on at a rather more sedate pace.
- quiet and rather dull: sedate suburban domesticity.
Source: The New Oxford American Dictionary, 2nd edition
Well, I didn't know that until now. Thanks for correcting me.