SCP Foundation

After lurking for months, I had to try my hand, unfortunately for you poor bastards. Any criticism will be appreciated. It IS my first, after all.

Thanks for allowing me into your ranks!

Once in this state, SCP-1850 will consume the pilot through [DATA EXPUNGED].

There is absolutely no reason to expunge this.

Also, the concept is pretty similar to SCP-127.

It appearance is typical of it's model

When on the ground, SCP-1850 is in it's "dormant" state

It's tail and wing are also seen to be mobile

due to the risk of damaging SCP-1850 beyond it's healing capabilities

the picture doesn't exactly look… biological.
at all.

Okay, your idea is workable, but it isn't exactly stellar. The idea of a suposedly mechanical construct turning out to be alive is too overused to carry the article.

There's also a few glaring problems with your presentation, such as the expungement mentioned above. Expunging someone to death is almost always a bad idea,
so you should really fill it in. But for the most part, your main issue is going to be that, even when you fix these things, your idea is a tad lacklustre, and you haven't presented a compelling 'hook' or an interesting angle on the type of object you have here.

One facet of this that you've worked in, but which I'd recommend expanding on, is the form this things has taken. You've picked a very distinctive and very old type of vehicle for this thing to resemble. Expand on this. Why the hell would someone build this thing? If it wasn't built, how sidi it come to be? If you can answer that question and present the answer in a compelling way, you might just have my upvote.

Give this the DNA of a known avian predator - an eagle or some such. Or maybe a falcon. One of the semi-tameable species.

And make it senescent. It's very old (back when it was [REDACTED] from an ordinary bird into an airplane, this type of plane was common!), and it needs to eat regularly. Don't feed it humans, just dump a hundred pounds of raw chicken in the cockpit, and then stand back (be VERY careful to not let the door snap off your fingers). If we don't let it out to fly at least twice a week, it batters itself against its hangar and could possibly damage itself, so we let it out under close supervision. It doesn't go far, it tries to shoot at things but its "ammunition" isn't very good consistency, etc etc.

It's showing signs of arthritis, so its food is being spiked with glucosamine and other meds. We can examine its insides if we tranquilize it beforehand, but it's still twitchy, and can sometimes bite.

We're damn lucky the thing doesn't seem to have
sexually imprinted on humans.

EDIT: okay, can I do a rewrite on this, can I can I?

I honestly really like this, but does the plane get sick, or age, or anything that could happen with animals? There are so many ways that you could take this. I'm upvoting in good faith, though.

This is not badly written per se, but it is basically just a plane version of SCP-127, as mentioned above. Withholding an upvote or downvote for now.

Well since the SCP is biological, aka a living organism. My problems with it is that you're saying that what it has are "like" organic components but that they're actually not.

Also backing what the other people are saying about the potential that this could have for aging and being diseased, while we might not have a functional living plane we certainly could have one that used to be functional but its pilot was drugged and this caused the SCP to have an engine-arrest or something.

This last one might just be a personal thing since I don't know how widely it is frowned upon, but you sign the note with a blatant self insert.

So it's a plane version of the Living Room.