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Hmmm. I did like the bits in the text boxes, but the rest of the actual prose and dialog seemed a bit stiff. The ending was fairly lame as well.
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The ending was lame, could definitely be better. I honestly wasn't bothered too terribly much by the writing, but it could be improved. The quote boxes were quite good, though.
Really, the ending is my main complaint about this.
When you left the channel the following was said about the book.
After my last comment the conversation basically stopped because we had just relied you weren't around and the topic shifted as it does in site 19. Randomly and quickly.
He should probably be dying from blood loss right now, just saying.
Other than that… how would no one notice?
"Hey, have you been to that professor's class yet?
"Man, I tried, but he never showed up! He hasn't been here for months1!
"Dude, what? Have you gone to the dean about it?"
"Yeah, he didn't give a shit, apparently this happens often."
Like, they don't even check his office?
Also, hell, why couldn't he just steal some fucking ink?