Please navigate to the tab entitled "Book of Faces". Also, I know the experiment at the bottom needs some work, but I can't pinpoint what is wrong with it. Advice in general on the article would be helpful, as well as advice specifically on the experiment, or if it should be scrapped altogether.
You don't need to make another thread for this, given that there's already a thread made by you regarding this. You should've just bumped that thread with the new draft.
My bad, how can I contact a moderator to delete this one?
Don't worry about it this time, I guess, but just keep that in mind in the future.
Also, it helps to link to your sandbox in the thread.
Overall, I still think it's pretty eh. I personally can't think of a good twist that could make this interesting for me, but what I can point out is that you seem to have some poor expungement/redaction in here. Just note;
- Does it make sense that this information would be redacted/expunged?
- Is this something that would necessarily be hidden from Foundation personnel?
- Would it be better to put just a flat out description here instead of hiding the information?
Futhermore, you should check out this essay written by a better writer than I on this topic, Zen and the Art of DATA EXPUNGED.