I would really appreciate some constructive criticism, so feel free to say anything
You can find the draft here
Thanks in advance
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This isn't bad for a first attempt. People-snails is a decent starting point, but you need to add something more than that. Maybe something about the entomologist who created the pole because he was in unrequited love with a snail and thought that she'll love him if he'd become a snail too. Or about complex social structures between the snails, that emulate human culture, because the snails are in denial about their state. Or something else. Something interesting, something beyond just a post that turns people into snails. The execution needs some more work too.
EDIT: Also see SCP-731 for a similar concept. This doesn't mean that you can't use this idea, just that you should keep 731 in mind and try to spin the idea in a different direction.
Thanks a lot for your time!
I really appreciate your constructivism. I guess it wasn't as interesting as I thought.
I'll see if I can't get it to work some time in the future. Maybe I'll just start again.
Also, sorry for my mistakes, english is not my first language, so thanks for your corrections.
Snails, you say? We could use some more snails.
A mysterious black lamp post with a swarm of purple snails that makes you go insane, kills you, then turns you into a snail and [DATA EXPUNGED] you if you kill one of the snails. While the mental imagery of a black lamp post with purple snails has promise, the execution of this idea is completely boring and uninteresting. Things that make you go crazy and kill you for no reason is quite high on the list of overdone cliches, and this is going to make you no friends.
I guess I should try to be more original, as I hadn't noticed this was such an overdone cliche.
I'll continue to try and improve my stories until they can finally turn out as something relatively good.
Maybe I'll just write it all over again and add some tweaks.
Anyways, thank you for the criticism!