I'm tired and almost falling asleep, but fuck, I was charmed by this.
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I like this enough for a +. Still needs more cracked out wishes.
Fixed two SCP-XXXXs for you.
I like the concept. I really do, but there's just something bugging me about this. I guess I'll give it the benefit of the doubt and upvote it until I can figure out what's bugging me.
Thank you for the fix and tentative up vote! definitely let me know if you figure out what's bugging you!
With the changes you've made, I'm not getting any hesitation /bother feelings anymore. Well done on a great SCP.
The only way this thing is getting my upvote is if I laugh. I didn't laugh.
yeah, to elaborate further, the concept you're going for is…like, it's inherently funny. by which i mean, to work it has to be funny, because you're trying to tell a joke. also to clarify, i don't mean that this should be a -j. this is a humorous mainlist article, like 504, or beauremont. "homeless drug addict genie" is a funny concept. the problem being that…i don't know if it's that the joke in itself isn't that funny, or that the way you're telling it isn't that funny, although honestly i'd lean towards the first one being the problem here. point is, i didn't laugh.
i think, in terms of specifics, this could be executed better if you just…hurry up and get to the punchline? like, you'll notice that humorous mainlists are not very long. i felt that the description was dragging on quite a bit proportional to the complexity of the joke.
Alrighty! I've reworked the entire format of the report! :) let me know how ya feel!
Homeless drug addicts are supposed to be played for laughs?
I liked this because "holy shit that's tragic" was the first thing to pop in my head.
Hello Friends! This is SCP #2 for me, I focus on feedback in the discussion section quite a bit and all criticism is very much appreciated!
Ehhhhh, I got to the three wishes bit and did not like where it was going. Just meh.
I changed the the wishes bit as I can understand you not liking the generic genie concept! I have changed it to an unlimited number of wishes, which are going to manifest as quite faulty most of the time. I'm not sure if you stopped reading at "three wishes", but I feel there is a lot more to this report than the description :3
I kind of like it now actually…the meaning of life one kind of made me want to know what he was thinking. +1
There isn't really an somewhat-objectively identifiable "homeless man" look. You can mention roughed-up clothes, unshavenness, bad hygiene, etc. but there is no one way or most common way for a homeless man to look.
Otherwise this is actually a fairly solid article, in my eyes.
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Removed the "homeless man" line entirely! Thanks for the feedback!
The tone here is kinda borked, but I like the concept and ending.
This started out funny, and then got very sad very quickly. I really just wanna hug the thing. You know, maybe they should try giving him some manner of opiate instead of meth, a downer would make him easier to talk to. Contrary to popular belief, most people on high-strength opiates, be it prescription Oxycontin(me) or its illicit cousin heroin, it doesn't make you that…screwy.
Regardless, +1
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