I would very much like any criticism on my SCP. Please be as thorough as you like. Here is the link: http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/benjamin-brogain
Let's have a look, author.
Note: I correct the given mistake only once. If you do not use the metric system, I will only make a single comment about it, even if it appears again in the rest of the article. If the draft has many language problems, I will only correct the most glaring ones. Unnecessary information will show as the copied text with the redundant information stricken through.
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Item #: SCP-XXXX
Object Class: Safe/Euclid/Keter
Special Containment Procedures:
Description:
SCP- is to be contained inside of a 2 meter by 2 meter cement storage cell lined with soundproofing foam in the Euclid objects containment wing of Site-64.
Measurements shouldn't be included unless they are essential to containment. E.g., it's okay to say 'standard' and you don't need to include the measurements at all, as that can actually cause more trouble and questions more often than not. This goes for materials as well, why does it have to be cement? Does something happen when we use a steel locker?
Personnel are to remain a minimum of 3 meters from SCP- s containment cube.
Then make the cube 3 meters larger. Less accident-prone.
So far, this is a pretty straightforward thing that kills you/drives you insane.
We get a lot of them, sometimes daily, and they don't work because it's not very interesting anymore. I recommend adding some more to this, because at this point the idea seems to be more of an entry on the log of anomalous items than an SCP object that would merit special Foundation containment.
I recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft. Go to that forum, post a quick summary of the concept you want to write up (don't link the draft unless someone asks), and reviewers there can help you make the idea more interesting and give you some advice on structuring the eventual article for smoothness of reading and narrative.
Feedback over, good luck
Thank you
I had made the changes suggested. Can you look over it again?