This idea hit me last night so I figured I'd give it a shot! Lemme know what you think!
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There are multiple cases where, instead of SCP-4516, it says SCP-3516 and SCP-1516, both slots that are already filled. It is only called SCP-4516 once and that’s at the beginning of the article.
Good post, but the first paragraph of the description mentions 4 gates when only 3 locations were given.
One of the coolest ideas I've read in a bit. I really hope you make some expansions to it or some more SCPs which are present inside the sphere! Maybe an MTF is formed to combat the cats-o-death? Also some explanation in how the cats beat the very technologically advanced would be much appreciated. Nontheless +1 !
This is, in my eyes, concept art. It's really cool, looks awesome, but ultimately it doesn't have enough depth or expansion on that cool factor.
"Wizard-planet with wizard-people and also the planet is a dyson sphere" is an amazing concept which you desperately need to expand on.
Tentative +1, but I really want to see this do more.
It's not a party until you summon a lesser demon.
unless 3/4ths of the O5 Council are in agreement.
Wouldn't it be simpler to say "without majority approval from the O5 Council?"
The description says SCP-4516 refers to four gateways, establishing SCP-4516-D as the gateway in a forest in the Dyson sphere, but then continually refers to the interior of the Dyson sphere as SCP-4516-D. Either give the Dyson sphere a separate designation, or just call it a Dyson sphere.
a handful of deities
This may just be nit-picky and down to personal tastes, but wouldn't the Foundation call them something like "Class-IV reality bending entities" or "Pistiphage Entities?"
The 'Discovery' section repeatedly uses present tense when it should be past tense.
until an identical event occurred on July 9, 2016, this time in North Korea.
You can just say, "in North Korea."
containment is established with a single fatality.
This may be personal preferences again, but shouldn't you say "with only a single fatality?"
What do SCP-4516-1 look like? Are they the same as the beings first encountered in the Bahamas?
whom is responsible
Change this to "who was responsible."
I agree with Varaxous. This needs to be expanded on because "alien environment with magical creatures and waring civilizations filled with wizards" is a really cool concept that can be a lot of fun to read and write about. Novote for now.
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