This is the first SCP I have ever attempted to write and I i'm just looking for constructive criticism and to see if my idea is any good. I will be adding more to and also tweaking what I already have but i'm just looking to see if this is a good start.
I moved your thread summary content to the first post and trimmed it above, OP, since it was taking up a lot of space on the forum listing. Try to keep thread descriptions under 7 lines so you don't visually crowd out other people's threads. ~Zyn
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