Item #: SCP-XXXX
Object Class: Euclid
Formatting's important, my dude! There should always be spaces between the different sections, and you can bolden the headings by adding a pair of asterisks to each side. Like **this**!
SCP-XXXX is to be locked away, available only for use when given higher permissions.
Locked away where? Given permissions from whom? Higher than what? There's a lot of missing information here.
Adorned at the top of SCP-XXX , there is a small operable keypad, with numbers 1 through 4. There is also a screen which displays the numbers that are pressed. SCPXXX resembles a commonly found wristwatch.
Weird variations on "SCP-XXXX" aside, I'm unsure how this thing resembles a commonly found wristwatch. It's got a screen, and buttons — even assuming you meant a digital watch (which you should really specify), it doesn't sound like any watch I've ever seen. Especially not a 'commonly-found' one.
[…] will then dispense microscopic nanobots for approximately 5 seconds before closing.
This is… not good writing. I'll try to elaborate, but essentially the issue boils down to:
- Using a sci-fi trope (nanobots) without a good reason other than 'nanobots are cool'.
- Using a sci-fi trope in a way that clearly and deliberately violates the laws of physics. This is not to say that sci-fi SCPs can't be written, or that every sci-fi article has to be exhaustively researched and accurate — quite the opposite, as some sci-fi articles are the best on the site. It just means that you need to try and embrace the genre more.
- Using 'nanobots'. That may sound harsh, but nanobots are used as a catch-all deus ex machina in a lot of fiction, and they're almost never used well. Of course you can use microscopic electromechanical entities in an article, and of course it's really cool. But don't just say they're nanobots unless they're actual, real-life nanobots. The Foundation wouldn't call a vampire a vampire; they'd call it a humanoid with a number of anomalous properties. Nanobots are the same. Create your own microscopic robots, and don't rely on bad science :)
[…] subject’s body will begin to regress into that similar of a kitsune fox often depicted in Japanese folklore
And then, we have this bit. Honestly, this is the part that would have confirmed my downvote if it were an actual article. There's no meat to it, no narrative, no progression; you just write down some things that happen. That's not a story. It's barely a shopping list. It feels to me like you just had an idea, and rather than thinking about how to write it, you just… wrote it. It's a thing that does a thing, at the end of the day, and any random-sentence-generator can come up with thousands of those. If you want this stuff to fly, you need a twist, a development, something to push it past a clinical document and into a story.
Try going back to the Ideas and Brainstorming Forum and getting some feedback there. And of course, feel free to PM me if you want help with ideas :)
