SCP Foundation

http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/dyllistan3

The draft has been changed (11/8/18) and hopefully improved in a different link under the "Damn Millennials" tab.

http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/dyllistan

Okay, here we go. Took a quick look at this since it's a short draft, here are my thoughts:

• For a Keter class SCP, the containment is pretty sparse.
• You have some extra text you don't need. You can take out the "Until a permanent method of neutralization of SCP-XXXX altogether is found" portion; stick to giving the instructions.
• students are to be discouraged > which students? Elementary? High school? College? Grad school? In which countries?
• (by either their teachers or Edpuzzle itself) > given that most readers might not know what Edpuzzle is (and it's likely copyrighted, so that might run into issues with the SCP wiki's creative commons licensing…) this might be confusing since we're not sure how the company works. Also, if you're relying on totally normal teachers to implement the containment… that's not something the Foundation would do. They'd probably disseminate some sort of disinformation campaign or something rather than telling teachers and/or this corporation who should have no idea that the Foundation exists "you need to do this"
• to ever take SCP-XXXX > phrasing. "Students are to be discouraged from ever taking"
• and teachers are to be told that such instances are glitches, > this is an overly casual phrasing. Besides, plenty of teachers might not know what a "glitch" is, and/or will reach out to Edpuzzle to ask why the things haven't been fixed yet. It almost seems like a better idea to just shut down Edpuzzle entirely or migrate it into a new company or something using a different approach.
• and they and Edpuzzle server operators are to treat is as such > this is confusingly worded and can just be a new sentence.
• i.e. delete > need a comma after i.e.
• SCP-XXXX whenever instances appears > instances appear
• if possible > should be earlier in the sentence. "i.e., if possible, delete SCP-XXXX instances whenever they appear

There are a lot of other small errors like random periods in the middle of sentences, spacing issues, "a SCP" should be "an SCP", and so on.

Overall… I'm not too sure about this. The "an argument is likely to break out. followed by physical assault unless seperated" (separated, btw) effect is pretty generic—take a look at the articles tagged with "compulsion". Furthermore, an SCP object's effect forcing someone to do something tends to be a bit of a lame narrative, since things are more interesting if there's a struggle involved, and/or if the people instead do terrible things of their own volition rather than just because the author needs them to for the story to work. Consider reading through the further discussion on the narrative issues of compulsion and addiction effects.

I recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft.