http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/dyllistan3
The draft has been changed (11/8/18) and hopefully improved in a different link under the "Damn Millennials" tab.
http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/dyllistan3
The draft has been changed (11/8/18) and hopefully improved in a different link under the "Damn Millennials" tab.
Okay, here we go. Took a quick look at this since it's a short draft, here are my thoughts:
There are a lot of other small errors like random periods in the middle of sentences, spacing issues, "a SCP" should be "an SCP", and so on.
Overall… I'm not too sure about this. The "an argument is likely to break out. followed by physical assault unless seperated" (separated, btw) effect is pretty generic—take a look at the articles tagged with "compulsion". Furthermore, an SCP object's effect forcing someone to do something tends to be a bit of a lame narrative, since things are more interesting if there's a struggle involved, and/or if the people instead do terrible things of their own volition rather than just because the author needs them to for the story to work. Consider reading through the further discussion on the narrative issues of compulsion and addiction effects.
I recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft.
Is the explanation of what Edpuzzle is and do are clear, or could it be improved?
Can't speak for Zyn, but I've never heard of Edpuzzle before, and had to look up "blended learning" as well (I'm familiar with the concept, but not that terminology). I'm still not 100% sure what Edpuzzle is. Do teachers make these videos themselves and upload them to Edpuzzle.com, or do they buy pre-made videos from Edpuzzle? Are Edpuzzles watched during class, or are these take-home assignments? Containment procedures for each of these cases would be radically different, and it's unclear from your description and containment how Edpuzzle works.
EDIT: Also, I definitely qualify as a millennial. I think you mean "Gen Z."
You know what, I think I will change the generation in the title to "Post Millennial" to minimize confusion (nobody can ever universally agree on which generation is called what).
Is the explanation of what Edpuzzle is and do are clear, or could it be improved?
I mean, I understood that it was some sort of online learning tool. The exact details don't really impact the quality of the piece. Making the explanation more clear won't fix the other errors.