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Sorry, but this idea won´t work. This is basically the old "monster that kills you" cliché.

Ideas like this can work if there is a story to go with it. While this does seem to be a monster manual entry the story decides whether it is doable or not. Sometimes newer writers don't understand how important a story is and skim over it in this forum. It would be appreciated Absurdity if you could tell us what story if any you have to go with your idea. Because it will admittedly have to be well written to be up to standards in this site.

Also, if you want people to check your sandbox you should post the link.

Actually it is asked that people only post their draft if someone asks for it or if it is optional. You should summarize your idea in this forum. Not go over a full fledged draft. That is for the draft forum.

Writer, I will say your idea as you have put it now is not at a high enough quality for this site. I believe like Congrio said you should read some newer articles to understand what people want but you should also read different articles and critique in the drafts and idea forums to understand what is and isn't recommended by experienced writers. Unless you do have a story, in which case we should hear it before passing judgment.

ElCongrio, this feedback is vague, unhelpful, and misleading.

Sorry, but this idea won´t work. This is basically the old "monster that kills you" cliché.

We have lots of monsters that kill that do quite well on the site, because there's more to the article than just the monster and the killing. Cliches are popular because they often work well; the problem then is keeping things unique, as opposed to just never writing that sort of formula again.

I recommend you to read series IV and V articles, to understand this page´s modern standards.

If you're going to try giving feedback in the forums, try to at least respond to specifics rather than posting a generic response that could be interpreted as relating to any number of drafts. Furthermore, the point of the forums is to help the author improve their work. If you don't have anything to say in that regard, let someone else handle making the first post.

Also, if you want people to check your sandbox you should post the link.

As per the Ideas and Brainstorming forum guidelines: http://www.scp-wiki.net/forum/t-1019200/how-to-use-this-forum-ideas