This entry leaves a bit TOO much to the imagination. It needs more of a hook.
Date: 15 Aug 2008 17:51
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Honestly, i have to agree…this is one of my older works. The original hook for this was that it was the "origin point" for several of my other entries, but I think I need to move away from that more. tried doing a edit for this not too long ago, but let me see if i can come up with a little more for this…
The additional pictures really do this one justice! With an item as large as this SCP is purported to be, these added a badly-needed layer of perspective.
It would also be nice to see some (bits and pieces of) documentation of further encounters with the life forms which seem to be indigenous to SCP-238. Maybe speculation or hints as to whether these are the people who, over time, have been lost within the SCP and were twisted to sinister ends or maybe even naturally produced creatures originating from an unknown point within the SCP and intended as a defense or hunting mechanism. Concepts which, with your subtle touch and some well-placed [DATA EXPUNGED], could make this a truly terrifying place to get lost on a cold Russian night, Dr. Gears.
Also imagine just how pear-shaped things would go if SCP-184 found its way in here.
I actually really liked this article. I'm imagining a scientific community, similar in purpose and style as the Foundation, except much larger and far older. This place housed hundreds, maybe thousands of SCPs within its sprawling facility. After some time, a localized event occurred that ended up crippling and destroying the entire facility, maybe pushing them into an emergency lock down so that nothing would escape. As the scientists and personnel locked within started going crazy, dying from hunger/thirst, or were killed off by unknown means, SCPs containment grew more and more lax. Eventually, escapes were commonplace, and a tiny "ecosystem" of SCPs developed in this massive underground world. Some SCPs were destroyed, some prospered, and some just disappeared. What's left in there are the strongest, most obscure, and hardest to contain SCPs. Undoubtedly, one of those SCPs is what killed the two agents.
On a insanely nerdy tangent…if ever there is a Foundation-based roguelike…it should take place inside 238.
I though I had mentioned that before.
"Ostrov Schmidta" literally means "Schmidt Island" in Russian, so you might want to rephrase that to "a single entrance on the Schmidt Island".
A little love could help.
An exploration log… maybe a new incident or tale… I like the idea of adding a note about slight changes in the atmospheric conditions due to changes in the biologic components, or finding lost Russian paperwork on the place.
Maybe a new project to deploy cheap unobtrusive sensors near the entrances and a little way in.
Sensor networks a getting really cheap these days, and the Foundation would be on that. Why not just stick a few cheap Zigbee or WiFi sensors on the walls? Some are very low power. It would be amusing to add a few ominous tiding every few months. Some sensors here, some new data there, something prompts a new exploration….
This needs more. Not much more, maybe just an experiment log. Do that and I upvote.
EDIT: Screw it, I like it. I have the idea of an enormous under ground organism, made entirely out of tunnels. Nonetheless, I would like to see some further exploration. Maybe set up one of those collaborative supplement pages.