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Yeah, I'm hoping that the title isn't foreshadowing the number of votes I get.

Anyway, here's the draft,, under the tab "Falling". (Fourth tab incase you're somehow illiterate, which means you can't read this but oh well)

Oh, and "Hole-y pit" does not count as critique. Neither does "Pit-iful", or "Bullpit". Or "Pits and giggles". Or "Pit Romney", "Adolf Pitler", "Stephen King's Pit", "Five children and Pit", "Forrest Pitaker", "Football Pit", "64-Pit", "Pitman: Blood money", "Blue, Great and bearded Pit", "Pitting bull", "Jesse Pitman", "The Pit Panth- Actually, I think you get the idea. I've just used up all of the derogatory puns, so none can be used against me.

Hope you like it! (I realize that exclamation mark was both wholly unnecessary and cringeworthy, but then again, so sum.)

Two things:

A) Is it too short? I think it might be too short.
B) Yeah, the emails might all morph into one great soft jelly thing, as the quotes kept fucking up. Anyone who wants to edit this and fix it, go right ahead. Many thanks. Please don't change anything else, though.
C) Are the emails a little bit narmy?

OK. I think you need to italicise some of the dialogue, like the note to the O5 and the bracketed section in the testing logs and emails. Do that and you might be able to pit it against the other scips.

Eh. I can't say this interests me. We've already got a ton of anomalous holes/pits/etc with things living inside (including one in a few different realities/universes).

The all-caps dialogue is pretty narmy (though if that's what you were intending, you can ignore this) and just seems like an attempt to imitate Beauremont.