I recommend you don't blackbox the Site number.
My bad! I thought that would be sorted out by admins/mods once it would be posted to the main-site.
The final sentence could be removed. Other than that, what about the cover? Does the book have any designs on it or a title? I feel it would greatly enhance the reader's imagery of the object than something so plain.
Do you mean this sentence:
"SCP-XXXX-1 entities have been witnessed carrying a variety of weapons, such as a Colt M1911, a steel baseball bat and a Tantō sword."?
I added information about the cover, not sure if it has been worded properly though. I also thought of making a picture for SCP-XXXX, but since my photoshop skills are limited, I haven't been able to yet.
The next section gets really hard to read due to how many times you use "death threat" and how you could simplify the passage.
As someone fairly new to clinical writing, how can I? I agree that "death threat" is used a lot.
The "experiments" are more like incident reports than any actual experimentation.
Thanks! I wasn't sure wether it were incident reports or experiments. :)
Overall, the concept is just a thing that kills you.
Yes, it is deadly. But that doesn't mean it 'just' kills. It would only be dangerous if the book were to be opened unlucky, and even then, you could hide from the clowns in a place secure enough. The clowns don't have a long lifespan anyways, as the incident logs hint at that.
What is the connection between the clowns and this book? Why do they carry weapons?
I know this is vague, but I haven't gotten any inspiration for a backstory. I'll add it once I came up with something. They carry weapons to kill the person who opened SCP-XXXX to a death thread.
Honestly, I would love to collaborate since I rather like my suggestion.
I appreciate your proposal, but I'll try to solo the article for now. If I were to stall writing this scip at some point, I'll send you a DM about a collaboration.
