Thank you to everyone that critted this. In no particular order: DrChandra,
Uncle Nicolini,
RockTeethMothEyes,
Agent MacLeod
IAmTheOoga,
magnadeus,
Meserach,
HotChocletyLez and
MaliceAforethought. I have a bad memory, please let me know if I forgot you!
I absolutely love it a lot more now, you've fixed almost every issue I had with it. My only concern would be to remove the closing statement from the first addendum, since it interferes with the non-linearity of the rest of the article.
Be proud to be my first +1 on the site!
I'm impressed to see how well the logs came out, I'm glad my advice was handy. Good read!
As soon as I zoomed in on that image I knew it had to be you 'house!
Just 5he right amount of goofy ness clever time traveling and general interesterability? Well you know what I’m trying to say. I liked it. If I could give it plus two I probably wouldn’t because that wouldn’t be fair. +1
I didn't think that the concept of "Time Traveling Hippies" would work so well as a scp. Well done Rounder.
+1
Is everybody employed by the entire Foundation just terrible at negotiations? Seems like half the interviews I've ever read on this site consist of Cover Story, followed by Overt Question That Lays All The Foundation's Cards On The Table, followed by The Poi Pointing Out That The Cards Played Consist of A Monopoly Property, A Shiny Charmander, And An Expired Library Card, then the Poi Immediately Ends The Meeting Revealing Nothing. The audience doesn't gain any new information, and I just feel dumb for having expected anything interesting to happen.