I'd like to write an SCP involving a magic vape pen with strange properties. I would like it to grant some sort of benefit to the user but at some cost to others, but nothing overpowered on both ends. Any ideas or suggestions?
I think it would be a cool idea, as a -j. also, some cool benefits would be
they get more intelligent.
they go faster.
they have better reflexes.
they are healed of sickness.
senses enhanced.
just random usefull things that people want.
some nerfs, i guess thats what you would call them could be,
you cant speak.
you run out of energy very quickly.
you become temporarily blinded.
you get injured in a random place.
you get a permanent marking on your body that everyone can see.
I think it would be a cool idea, as a -j.
How would this make a good joke article? What's funny about it?
also, some cool benefits would be
I'm not entirely sure about these, since they're pretty generic and we see a lot of "gives random effects with random costs" formula articles get deleted since they're pretty low-effort so far as consistency and thematics go. If the effects seem like something made by a random generator or picked out of a hat, chances are the audience won't be super impressed.
What makes this atomizer pen, or EGo cigarette (they have actual names, not just called vape pens) 'magical'? Magic is a loose term here, and most people would interpret something being magical as having thaumatic properties or something along those terms.
On a broad note, making a magical object that seems to benefit the user at some arbitrary cost is seen as a more cliche article to write. I'm not saying that it is not recommended, but it requires a bit of a new perspective in order to not seem stale. Most items that are in containment are there because of the strict degree of their anomalous nature - what makes this pen anomalous?
could be something good. Maybe if you had different juices that would do different things.
- "Skywalker" Makes you float higher the more you hit it. Risk: Permanent throat and lung damage, and possible suffocation from the thin stratosphere if not the helium gas.
- "Dragon's Breath". You can breath fire. Risk: Self immolation, third degree burns in the mouth and possibly a lost tongue.
- "Serpent's Tongue". exhale smoke that looks and behaves like a snake. Risk: Very little, the snake isnt venomous, but a bite would hurt like hell.
- "Komodo's blood". Upon oxidation, the exhaled smoke/vapor becomes thick cyanide gas. Risk: Cyanide gas, need I say more?
- "Stonehenge". Your whole body becomes as hard as stone. Risk/downside: your body becomes as heavy as if it were stone
Just an idea
ReddZedd, Bitches.
It would be interesting to see Wondertainment do something like this in a bid for older consumers, and It would also work well with Canloo's idea, as other Wondertainment scips have different flavors or types.
Introducing: Dr. Wondertainment's Magical Cloud Machine!™ With all new super magical flavors! Wondertainment™ inc. not liable for injury or asphyxiation caused by Magical Cloud Machine™
We don't need more 'magic object that does a thing' skips.
that's not very helpful. they are here for ideas not someone shutting them down.
This forum is here for giving advice for an idea. If the user thinks that an idea is not worth doing, they should say so. I would much rather hear that my idea is a cliché or problematic in the idea stage than hear it after spending time on a draft.
However, don't take that to mean this feedback is not problematic. It would need much more explanation to be acceptable critique. But I just want to state that in my opinion as long as someone else has posted detailed critique helping to better the idea (or you say it along with the warning) and you are detailed about why they may not want to use the idea, it is acceptable to say you don't think the idea is worth pursuing.
kiyohemmer, leaving feedback like this is not helpful to the OP, and runs contrary to the rule that all criticism posts must contain some sort of helpful content for the OP and other readers. Please re-read the Criticism Policy for clarification as to what is considered a good criticism post.
dude, literally any SCP that is inanimate is a 'magic object that does a thing'
ReddZedd, Bitches.
While I agree that the commenter should have specified more, they do have a point. To elaborate on what this person means (or at least I think they do) is that you need a story to get an idea like this off the ground. SCPs aren't just weird items anymore, they are stories about the weird items in containment. Who made these pens? Why did they make them? These are some great ways to create a story for an idea. I would suggest looking at articles from series V to get a better idea of what people look for in SCP articles nowadays. Good writing.
I just wan to thank everyone for the input. :] You've all been helpful.