Thank you to MangoFlan, Mayoculpa, Celsius 451, Shaggydredlocks, and ReverendFox for the crits. Photo was taken by myself of a gun I own.
Hi, this is very well made and I can see good experience and time put into it. Just one suggestion though; you might want to have a test explaining how exactly the bullet transported itself to the victim via wormhole or whatever as it may be interesting. Other than that very good.
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I really like this but here is some little things. When it gets to the tests, the line saying who can do it should be in the special containment procedures. The random bold text mid paragraph can not be bold. It is not necessary for it to be otherwise.
Anyway, this is a great pirate related skip. Good job.
Thank you. Criteria have been moved to the Special Containment Procedures section and re-worded to fit. Bolded text has been un-bolded.
Appreciate the attention!
Reluctant downvote, primarily due to the test logs, which don't do a whole lot to explore the (really very cool) effect, it's mainly just a longer rehash of what's already clear in the description. The final test does bring out something new, but it seems kind of random and disconnected — I think something wilder, more close to its actual effect may have been more satisfying.
There's also the SCProcedures hosting the description of its anomalous effect, I think that should be reworded as instructions.
I loved how it ended though, that extra little bit did a good job of deepening intrigue, and left me wanting to know what's going on with the other gun.
Several of my drafts had no test log but I kept getting questions like "how does the Foundation know in such detail how this thing works?" I wrote the test log trying to show the Foundation figuring out the function in as few steps as possible.
I did try to keep it interesting with the incident involving Researcher Helm and the last test, and I'll look at changing up the last test, but I honestly don't know how else to show the process and make it interesting without bloating the test log further than it already is.
As far as the "criteria" list for it's anomalous effect, it was under the Testing tab, but Baronjoe pointed out that knowing who the gun will target would be important information and should be presented with the Containment Procedures.
Your thoughts?
Thanks to a crit by Shaggydredlocks, the results of the final test have been changed to something more along the lines of 4282's anomalous ability. Tampering with the firearm caused the teleportation mechanic to fail, instead of causing the bullet to come out "super duper fast lel .01% the speed of light wow so random." Let me know what you think.
The test log has been moved off-article. People who still wonder how the foundation came to understand how SCP-4282 works can view the test log via the link in-article. A short list of attributes has taken its place for ease of reading. The test log was by far the biggest negative of this article and was too hard to get through.
Neat item, and I liked the bit with the framed dclass and shot researcher, but not much story or spookiness. Maybe imply something (extra) unfortunate or spooky about the helmsman's wrath? A serial killer boating around killing pirates might work
Actually, sidenote, wouldn't it be fun if it turned out the researcher pirated the tycoons yacht? That would be too coincidental without something about fate or whatever though