Why does it say that the creature is male, but then the tab says it is genderless? When it says "Sex: N/A".
Date: 06 Jul 2014 05:43
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Late, but in-universe confusion from the 1948 American guy writing the report not understanding the information he's been given.
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Well, Victim-011 repeatedly refers to the subject as "her" - perhaps the incident report was prepared by a female agent?
Notes on article: Typo at the beginning of the interview, where the interview subject is referred to as Victom-011. Also, I would recommend replacing the word "slime" with "mucus", as this is more properly descriptive of a snail's secretions. Other than that, stellar work, and it's nice to see that the UIU doesn't always come in second when securing a subject.
Friend, look what you gave. It's decently written and the photoshop is passable, but the core concept feels too monster-of-the-week for my taste.
Also, I have some major reservations about the UIU format you guys have got going on here. Having a brief summary upfront and breaking it up into tabs makes it feel more document-y, sure, but both these things kill the narrative flow for me.