SCP Foundation

Click on "GOOD EGG" in the Table of Contents

This is an SCP about the GoI I'm slowly building, MAKE WISH FOUNDATON (as seen here) . This feels sorta good to me, but I also feel that it doesn't make sense to anyone but me. Cliches here:

An interview in which the anomaly is overly cryptic, followed by the interviewer suffering.

This one's less there but:

(GoI/PoI here) gets one over the Foundation, making them look like fools in the process.

I'd say the last one is there because of the Foundation just letting in what is basically the equivalent to an acid attack.

My main problems:

• Is the formatting good? I'm just kind of experimenting with it.
• Is the idea interesting enough? Does my wording make enough sense?
• Does it properly integrate the two cliches and does it do it well enough?

This is sort of the start to the entire story of the MAKE WISH FOUNDATON that I'm starting to do. Title is a work in progress, most likely will change it later. I'm sort of looking for more in depth critique with this, but all critique is much appreciated. Thank you!

Okay, took a quick look at this. Overall, it seems a little shaky. Right from the start of the description you have some pretty noticeable simple writing errors and unusual wording, like in "with it's anomalous effects's manifestation occurring in 2018" and "A 1 km radius around SCP-XXXX is subject to a meteorological anomaly" (better phrasing would probably be something like "a localized meteorological anomaly affects a 1-km radius area with SCP-XXXX as its center. And then make the next part a separate sentence). Species names definitely need common names in parentheses or footnotes, since the average reader likely doesn't have those memorized. Addendum XXXX-2 starts with a lowercase word. "You think your tough shit, don't you?" should be "you're". And so on.

With regards to your questions:

I dunno about this. I'm not a big fan of the Foundation being portrayed as dumb/incompetent for the sake of making them look dumb, so this is pretty much not my kind of piece and it'll be difficult for me to like it if those are the two cliches you've picked. Maybe this would be much more interesting as a tale, but I personally am not too sure how to improve it since it's build on cliches and the core concept of an egg at a hospital that hatches into a generic goofy thing for a GoI isn't super unique to me. The backstory you have is more compelling, but that's my personal response here.