SCP Foundation

Going for the overly cryptic interview.

Got this idea approved a while back; didn't start on it until now. Out of courtesy, I also checked with FortuneFavorsBold on making implicit references to 2000.

Anyway, let me know what I can improve overall.
Thanks in advance.

Okay, got caught up in a bunch of things, sorry for the wait.

So… overall, the writing seems solid. I don't remember seeing any errors besides the occasional extra slashes and brackets in the interview, which seem to be placeholders. I will say, however, that it gets pretty confusing when you have the same person speak but in different lines, like so:

Dr. Testa:

Dr. Testa:

SCP-XXXX-2:

Is there a reason the interview is formatted like that, rather than using text in italcized brackets to indicate pauses in conversation?

Conceptually… I feel like I'm missing something. I don't really understand what the point of the coin is, or the reason the humanoid showed up out of the blue. I'm guessing that the end of the interview is meant to kind of spoon-feed the exposition to the reader at the end, but there's just so much of it that I feel like I have trouble picking out the narrative (and I'll be honest, I wasn't totally thrilled when I opened the collapsible and found such a long log).

I do think you have some great lines in the interview, with the whole "They survived the odds" setup. I'm just having a hard time figuring out what happened behind the scenes. The SCP-2000 reference is pretty straightforward since resets for k-class scenarios are mentioned, but if there was additional context reliant on knowledge of that article, I think I missed it.

What does the coin represent, and why did the humanoid show up? What am I missing here?

The coin represents the inevitability of humanity's doom.

I feel like this is kind of a stretch, especially since "doom" isn't as simple as a coin flip.

It waits by flipping a coin, to spook and remind the Foundation of the inevitability of humanity perishing.

Which comes off as kind of unnecessary and on the overdramatic side, and ultimately doesn't really mean anything unless one assumes that the entity has all this slate-wiping power and isn't just talking cryptic nonsense.

I still don't know about this, since the situational setup still feels shaky. I was wondering why the entity doesn't just upfront tell the Foundation about the deal it expects them to honor, rather than dancing around the issue and playing with a coin.

Maybe ask Shaggydredlocks to take a look. He's great at pointing out plotholes and logical inconsistencies and might have suggestions on how to address this.

Uploaded the second draft.

Cleaned up the description and format as Laonasa and Zyn have seen fit. But, more importantly, I've cleaned up the story taking the approach Shaggydredlocks showed me.

No more 2000, no more "wiping the slate clean," no more convoluted plot with a hundred hidden pieces. Just a man, a woman¹, and a coin, exploring our perception of fate.