Author, what grade are you currently in at school? Most successful SCP authors have at least some college-level writing experience, since clinical tone is typically covered in college. If you haven’t encountered clinical tone or writing analytical essays in school yet, it can be hard to write an article that possesses the unique "flash fiction as written by a professional scientist" tone the site audience is looking for. If you tell us where you are academically, we can recommend some materials you can study up on, such as these college resources for clinical tone:
http://www.aje.com/en/arc/editing-tip-maintaining-formal-tone-scientific-writing/
http://academicguides.waldenu.edu/writingcenter/scholarlyvoice/tone
https://healthcare.utah.edu/brand-and-style-guide/writing-guide.php
Currently, what you have here is not likely to do well on the site at all. Your formatting is incorrectly done, which automatically makes the piece look sloppy because it's one of the absolute basics for a typical SCP article. Please use the template available in the How to Write an SCP Guide for the correct formatting code.
Additionally, you have a lot of overly casual language, and lots of simple spelling errors (it's "pommel" not "pomal"). Overall, this comes off as very shakily written, and definitely not at the level of professional clinical tone the site is expecting.
I suggest reading over this essay on common SCP pitfalls to get an idea of what elements to avoid putting in an SCP article, and reading some more recently posted SCP articles to get a feel for what the site audience wants to see nowadays.
Also, from now on, definitely get your concepts checked in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you start drafting. That will help ensure that by the time you start on a full article, you have an idea you know for sure the audience will like because people will have told you so.
