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My SCP got deleted off the site recently after falling under the required reputation for deletion, how can I make my article better?

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Hello

I recently made a new SCP, SCP 4472 - The Sky Ghost. However unfortunately it was deleted.

It was a Keter class SCP that focused on a gaseous extraterrestrial entity currently residing in an african country. The SCP could enter people's bodies and control their minds briefly however the main bulk of the article described a process the SCP followed at exactly 7:00pm every night.

Thank you for your help!

a gaseous extraterrestrial entity currently residing in an african country. The SCP could enter people's bodies and control their minds briefly

The SCP would rise out of the ground in a certain spot by using a hand appendage attached to a humanoid combat form

the entity would take control of the humans present in the area and attempt to summon a massive quadrapedal entity

Okay, but why does this happen? And of all the places for this thing to manifest, why Africa?

From here the rest of SCP 4472's Race would appear from their planet of origin and consume the human race by entering into the bodies and taking control of almost every single human on Earth.

Okay, but why do they do this? The ritual is apparently to summon hard-to-kill monsters that then summon the alien race from their planet, but why is it so complicated and why are the hard-to-kill monsters even necessary? Why doesn't the alien race just come straight to earth right now?

I feel like you've got a lot of material here, but it's kind of loosely set up more for rule-of-cool reasons rather than a coherent narrative. Granted, D&D campaigns can get away with this a bit with just the "that's how it is in these magical lands" and Yu-Gi-Oh card mechanics are just wacky for the heck of it (this setup reminds me a bit of the http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Ancient_Treasure "Ancient O" combo, which is similarly nonsensical but looks kind of cool in the episode it's introduced), but for an SCP article, the audience will want to see more of a method to the madness.

So… why does all this complicated stuff need to happen, rather than the aliens just showing up?