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http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/the-scarlet-prince

I just need a review on my SCP, and I need to see if you can go back to your previous revisions of the SCP, not just the last revision. Along with that, this is me first SCP attempt, so I don't know if I followed all the rule correctly… I'm assuming I did, but aye, doesn't hurt to be cautious.

First of all this is my opinion so if you feel I am wrong then that is fine. First this SCP is VERY VERY powerful and in the Special Containment Procedures it says that it can walk around and will get anything it wants from every SCP or scientist no matter the clearance and it says in Addendum #4667-1 that he killed a member of a research team because he did not give documents on SCP-682. If that was true, and this SCP did exist that would cause major problems, and the facility would no longer be able to function in any way. Also being incredibly strong does not make a SCP interesting that is especially apparent in this SCP, there is no hook to this SCP there is only the fact that it is overly powerful. I would suggest you tone down the powers but still make him dangerous in some way.

First off: You didn't follow the advice in How To Write An SCP. You've written a super-powered character who mostly exists to be Cool.

This character seems like he'd be fun to write in power fantasy fanfiction. There's nothing wrong with that at all. However, that will not work as an article on this site — at least not on its own.

We see lots of new authors writing SCPs like this: a ton of superpowers, some crosslinks to popular SCPs, and hints at a mysterious backstory.

The problem is, that's usually only interesting to the author and a few other people. To everyone else, this will seem silly or uninteresting because we've seen literally thousands of deleted articles just like this one.

You will not be able to make this article work with your current skill level. You don't need to feel bad about this — MANY writers wrote stuff like this starting out. (I sure did.) It's also good to write drafts like this so you can practice writing and improve your skill.

But you'll probably need a different idea if you want to make an SCP that survives on the site. And you should go read the writing guides!

(There are lots of typos and grammar errors in this. If you don't know how to fix those, start with a spellchecker to fix some, and try to find someone who can help you fix the others.)