SCP-XXXX , the "hot" tub
SCP-XXXX , the "hot" tub
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First things first, your containment procedures. I think that converting the whole area into a site for the hit tub is a bit overkill. Also considering it’s a hot tub, it would seem possible that the foundation could transport it. Also you should pick either safe or thaumiel… not both. Also access in the foundation generally isn’t class based but based off of researchers access levels… this shouldn’t really be a problem for you because it’s a safe class scp but still.
appearing to the eye to be warm
I wouldn’t knkw what appearimg to the eye to be warm means… maybe say giving off steam or word it differently.
Any objects affected by SCP-XXXX take on the anomalous properties of SCP-XXXX
Does this mean objects made cold by this th7ng can make other objects cold and so on? If this is the case how are they destroyed? Do they also maintain a cold temperature? I would just scrap this part…
Another problem I see here is that you claim objects freeze instantly. Your picture shows D class leaving the hot tub completely and maybe even crawling a few steps. They also look made of snow… this shouldn’t be a big problem, it’s just a possible nitpicky thing.
You may want to Call the testing addendum a testing log
SCP-████ was unable to be warmed, and the table it was placed on also froze completely.
And the table would freeze the ground and the ground everything else…. idk… it seems to me like this is a world ending scp… maybe just make the objects frozen by this thing permenantly frozen and cold to the touch. Also it would be interesting if you actually selected an scp to test here rather than blacking it out. I’d recommend a newer one because link and build and all…
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The rest of your addendums just seem like standard testing… some of which should have occurred before scp Cross testing. Also there are inconsistencies in your testing, like the wolf dying instantly while you had a 30 second gap before the d class died, which btw the foundation may not actually sacrifice a d class because they already know it freezes wolves. There’s no reason for the last few tests to be classified either.
Overall there is really no story here which is so,etching many newer scps are kind of expected dti have nowadays.
Also you should pick either safe or thaumiel…
I don't think this is Thaumiel, since it's not really a reliable containment option, and can cause harm to things put in it.
Author, I recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft.
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