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gas-giant

"Gas giant" needs no hyphen.

suggesting the pulse is emitting

Being emitted.

Two days later, Dr. Lebeau recovered and has been deemed free of the hazard.

The Foundation would force amnesia to make sure. They wouldn't just assume.

It's unusual, strongly inclined elliptical orbit causes its orbit around the Sun to be as long as 12,500 Earth years.

"Its strongly inclined elliptical orbit around the sun is 12,500 Earth years."

in it's orbit

Its.

no chance of collision is probable

"the chance of collision is negligible"
"collision is extremely unlikely"
Take your pick.

from it's outer-most

Its. Also, outermost.

This probe has attached to it many measuring instruments in order to gather additional information on SCP-2108. Information such as temperatures, photographs of SCP-2108 in infrared, possible composition of SCP-2108, and atmospheric readings.

"The intent of this probe is to obtain additional information about SCP-2108, including temperatures, infrared photographs, possible composition, and atmospheric readings."

More things by Sensei Le RoofSensei Le Roof, 25 Nov 2014 22:41

I have to ask…

No appendages (i.e. arms, legs) or orifices (i.e. a mouth) are present.

Do you seriously believe the Foundation doesn't know what "appendage" and "orifice" mean?

by Sensei Le RoofSensei Le Roof, 25 Nov 2014 22:10

There was a tale where for some reason they had to insert an agent (Sophia Light) into the time stream to become worshiped and do miracles or something using skips. I don't remember what it was, or where to find it, but it was well written and was essentially Jesus.

I get this now. I like it. +1

by DecibellesDecibelles, 25 Nov 2014 21:55

Pictures are broken.

by Agent MacLeodAgent MacLeod, 25 Nov 2014 21:42
dankaardankaar 25 Nov 2014 21:42
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2108

SCP-2108 emits a beam of electromagnetic radiation, similar to a pulsar. The radio beam is emitted at regular intervals of approximately every 26 days, suggesting the pulse is emitting from a single point on SCP-2108 and that a day for SCP-2108 is approximately 26 Earth days.

Speculation, especially as pulsars have two beams. More likely is that it has a rotational period of 52 days. Additionally, this thing would have been discovered real early on, like in the 40's or 50's. And it would keep being rediscovered, due to its proximity to Earth and regularity of pulses.

These comets, now designated SCP-2108-2, have no inherent orbit, as their destination will always result in colliding with the Sun, or a planet within our solar system.

Incorrect They have an orbit: it just so happens that they constantly intersect another celestial body, preventing them from making a full orbit.

Due to SCP-2108's massive gravitational field, Earth's weather patterns, orbit, and magnetic field will be affected as SCP-2108 nears.

This puts it's chance of detection at 100%, as it would cause notable discrepancies with anything else in the Solar System. Everybody from a hobbyist with good equipment to NASA would notice these descrepencies, and eventually find this SCP as the cause.

by dankaardankaar, 25 Nov 2014 21:42

So…is…this a quantum immortal whose alternate-world "corpses" wind up appearing next to her after each branching point?

Of course, I could be completely off base with that speculation…

by Julian AshenveilJulian Ashenveil, 25 Nov 2014 21:38

On this alone, it's not really grabbing me. That's not to say you can't change my mind as you are in the ideas and are still planning out the tale. My questions are why did they wake up in that universe? Was this mirror universe SCP in the normal world? Why are humans considered SCPs? Do they possess abilities or are just an average human? Do humans pose a threat to the alternate universe the same way in the normal world? If so, how? Like I said before, you're probably still in the rough ideas and will expand later on. These are just some things to consider when writing. As of right now though, it's not grabbing me, although you could possibly change my mind depending on how well you execute the tale. If you need any more help and faster feedback, I suggest the Chat.

Re: A story by Bemi AttoBemi Atto, 25 Nov 2014 21:36

It is willing to communicate because it is a.) in a perpetual, delirious state and b.) it believes they have already won - true believer syndrome. I understand your complaint though. It is haughty because it still knows something (or at least, believes it does) that the Foundation does not.

by MetaphysicianMetaphysician, 25 Nov 2014 21:33

Thanks for the kind words! Added to the interrogation log: just a better description of what happened at the end. Wanted it to end abruptly but not that abruptly.

by MetaphysicianMetaphysician, 25 Nov 2014 21:31

I enjoyed everything about this except for the dialog in the Interrogation. It is jarringly weak and cliché compared to the other excellent parts. Personally, I find that dialog is the hardest thing to write well, so I get that.

In this case, 2480-1 is simultaneously compliant with requests for information yet obnoxiously haughty. I don't buy the combination, especially because it seems forced for the sake of exposition. But this article is already broad and detailed, so this bit of exposition probably isn't necessary. I think it might work better if 2480-1 didn't respond in English at all - Dr. Hull's (mostly unanswered) questions can provide any necessary exposition. Besides, 2480-1 is plenty threatening in its physicality - I'd exploit that to effect.

+1

by Michael AtreusMichael Atreus, 25 Nov 2014 21:30

*This* is genius-level SCP writing.

by greenwoodjwgreenwoodjw, 25 Nov 2014 21:28

This right here is some damn fine Lovecraftian horror.

by Von PincierVon Pincier, 25 Nov 2014 21:23
dankaardankaar 25 Nov 2014 21:21
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2167

Why lead? Why foam? Nothing in the description leads me to believe that they would be more effective at containing this than bare concrete.

Next time, you should post only when multiple people give approval: if you fix what's wrong, you may introduce new errors, or other errors will stand out more because the more serious/pervasive errors are gone.

by dankaardankaar, 25 Nov 2014 21:21

Overall, this is highly reminiscent of Series I articles, which are relatively simple and reflect an era of the site where standards were lower. If you're looking to read SCPs for inspiration or know-how, I recommend reading the high-rated Series II and III articles (SCPs with numbers from 1000 to 2999), because those better represent what the site is looking for nowadays.
Yes, still stealing from Zyn… :-)

SlidSlid 25 Nov 2014 21:10
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2288

I was going to upvote anyway because it's a great entry, but the mental picture of an infinitely increasing mountain of corpses at Site-███ just makes it perfect. I love it.

by SlidSlid, 25 Nov 2014 21:10

You're the best.

by Von PincierVon Pincier, 25 Nov 2014 21:04

Pincier, I'll be blueprinting this eventually, but preliminary model crashed my laptop. Nothing was saved.

… but I'll be trying on my PC so, please, gimme time and I'll give you Solidarity.

by Dr ReachDr Reach, 25 Nov 2014 21:03

My pleasure. Had fun with it. :)

by Dr ReachDr Reach, 25 Nov 2014 20:59
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