I don't know, this just feels like generic Herman Fuller crossed with a generic multi-flavor/effects Series I skip without too much of a charm. The execution is okay, but never makes me get over those two. This could somewhat work if you expanded on the actual backstory rather than the kid's stint at HF.
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This time it made me laugh.
The downplayed snark here really sells it for me as something this guy hammered out while angrily eating a scorched, half frozen burrito and accidentally hit "submit to database"
I found it funny enough to upvote and have saved it for my own personal enjoyment even if it gets deleted.
Play that, then start an air-raid siren in the background as the intro ends. At least 10x better.
Thanks. I went with absorbers initially, but spellcheck kept telling me it was wrong, so I went with the next best thing. And yeah, "her" was a typo.
Goddammit, that last line. I just read Timmy because I'm going through Series II in order I cannot handle this right now thank you very much
Instead, the guy successfully reads through a 400-page incantation without pause, nukes Dave triumphantly, drinks a pack of beer in celebration and accidentally DWI's himself into a tree.
This is probably the best summation of anything I've ever written.
'Malfunctioning mundane item' isn't really funny.
'Vengeful employee entering something into the system because it annoys him so much' is…actually somewhat funny.
I would suggest getting to know the site and reading a few successful articles (Preferably recent ones) to get to know what the expectations are, as well as using the Sandbox to put your drafts in and using the forums and chat as a few people linked above.
And for the love of god, don't self-upvote.
Ehh, yeah. There's nothing here to find funny. If the joke was "No effort put into skip" thats already covered by the procrastinati joke skip, which doesnt even have a number. If it's excessive use of redaction… still not really funny. I'd give feedback to help improve, but there's nothing really to improve.
Staff is treating this as a regular article at the moment. It'll be processed when deletions go on as normal.
Probably because there are lots of forms of reality bending, or it's not particularly well-defined? Ask Crayne. (HEY CRAYNE IF YOU'RE BROWSING RECENT POSTS COME ANSWER THIS)
Damn. That's some next-level spook.
The thing that gets me, though, is that opening statement. It's the 'don't think about penguins' mentality. The first thing you thought about when you read that sentence was, well, penguins. Of course.
When I read that intro, I think of them yelling 'THIS THING DOESN'T EXIST DON'T EVEN THINK ABOUT BELIEVING THAT IT'S REAL NOPE NOTHING TO SEE OR THINK ABOUT HERE'.
To be fair, though, this is an interesting conundrum- it's easy to restrict information to those with a security level that's too low, but how do you do the opposite?
Also, you've made something truly overpowered… and interesting at the same time. I, a lowly peon in the scip-craft world, feel that I have to acknowledge that. Kudos.
The major issue with this SCP is the lack of reader engagement. I'm not exactly sure what is going on, but from what I can tell, it's a rice field that chooses a random person to watch over it and forces them to be very hostile and unreasonable. That's not a very interesting concept, since there's no narrative or emotional hook to get the reader to care about the story. Try to draw the reader in somehow, whether it be via characters or narrative twists or something like that. As it is now, this SCP is just boring.
And if the whole world is crashing down… fall through space out of mind with me.
I'm definitely considering developing this idea further in a third interview, where he complains about how much work he had to do in the past. Thing is, he becomes whatever the villagers want him to be, so during the Cultural Revolution, he would probably be denouncing people who believed in previous iterations of himself, which is a pretty interesting idea now that I think about it…
How come there's no "reality bending" tag? Is it under a different name?
Disorientation of a half dream half reality, new information being presented in familiar yet unexpected methods, and world building in every corner. I hunger for more.
I don't get it,
please use the sandbox
I've seen everything here before, from the ragtag trio of clashing personalities, to Neo-Tokyo, to skipping past everything interesting in Neo-Tokyo to spend time at a seedy bar. Seriously, the word 'pub' made me cringe more than any of Thorn's antics. I wasn't the hugest fan of AIDA for the same reasons, and I hope this series shapes up differently.