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Staff Post - Deletion Vote by ZynZyn, 24 Oct 2016 23:31

Author, if you want to delete your article, find out in the [deletion guide]. I reverted it back to pre-wipe and fixed the title.

by ClassyBulbasaurClassyBulbasaur, 24 Oct 2016 23:22

Hi. I've just written a short paragraph on what I think.
Take it with a grain of salt though, I have't written many articles myself.

Currently this is quite boring. I realise that it is not finished yet, but this really needs more.
I slogged through the containment procedures (does it really have to be that long? I suggest you cut down if possible), then read the description which didn't really get me excited. The election and R/E/X intrigues me but unfortunately you didn't explain much about the procedure.

The Monitoring station is located thirty (30) meters directly across from the Dormitories D-2 entry point………

Take out the (30). This includes all the other numbers in the article. I have no idea where this trend came from, but it's a complete waste of time.

Otherwise, your grammar and tone is quite good.
In my opinion, you're on the right track. The only thing to do here is to make it more interesting.

Re: SCP-XXXX (The Table) by Therice ManTherice Man, 24 Oct 2016 23:22

ronor20001, instead of posting multiple comments in succession, please edit your previous post using the "edit" function under the "options" tab to the lower right of every comment. That prevents spam buildup, and it's in the rules.

Mod Post - Open by ZynZyn, 24 Oct 2016 23:22

Werner Heisenberg and Erwin Schrödinger were two totally different guys, and were largely opposed both ideologically and scientifically. In particular Schrödinger's famous feline was a critique of the Copenhagen Interpretation. They also had very different relationships with the Nazis.

by sirpuddingsirpudding, 24 Oct 2016 23:20
Mf99kMf99k 24 Oct 2016 23:11
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2936

honestly, I'd recommend asking for more advice before posting to the main site. The main issues I'm having here are with tone and concept, in other words, there are a few scp-cliches in this, and the wording doesn't seem particularly clinical to me.

I feel that the creature itself is somewhat salvageable, but we have enough creepy monsters that go into an aggressive state periodically.

by Mf99kMf99k, 24 Oct 2016 23:11
by AetherialSkiesAetherialSkies, 24 Oct 2016 23:10
Mf99kMf99k 24 Oct 2016 23:06
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2973

incredibly short, off format. Concept could work with more elaboration

by Mf99kMf99k, 24 Oct 2016 23:06
Mf99kMf99k 24 Oct 2016 23:05
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2518

Though I find the concept to be interesting, I feel that there needs to be some revision to the addenda. I was confused by the halloween-related ones.

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Re: Hello Woooorld by ZynZyn, 24 Oct 2016 23:03

Actually, I like the core concept: An arrow that disintegrates things. The problem is in the poor execution. I would suggest, in rewriting, to spend time conveying exactly how it functions, how it "disintegrates" what it comes in contact with, and the limits of its effect. Be concise but detailed with no extraneous information, but with all necessary information. Does that make sense?

I hope you take your time and write an improved version of the concept. Make sure to get help from the many great writers of this site. They'll help you with revisions, spelling, sentence structure, tone; everything needed to write out an interesting SCP.

by taintedvisagetaintedvisage, 24 Oct 2016 22:55

Hello! I am Eleros, and currently I am just an SCP reader, but I am working on my own SCP I hope to publish to sandbox fairly soon. So yeah, I'm kind-of an introvert and I like playing video games.

Hello Woooorld by Eleros VecchioEleros Vecchio, 24 Oct 2016 22:55

I feel horrible now, but I had to add one.

"The Power of Rock" by DrBlacklineDrBlackline, 24 Oct 2016 22:50

I'm not even entirely sure what this is. Metal disks are incredibly common, and this… appears to be a metal disk that makes you uncomfortable? I've had worse "anomalous" effects from eating expired food. I don't really see the niche this SCP fills that hasn't been done many times before.

I wouldn't even bother rewriting this idea. Scrap it and try something different instead. Think of an event or a concept, then work out from there. "Bad Feel Metal Disk" is boring. Good luck on your next attempt, though!

by taintedvisagetaintedvisage, 24 Oct 2016 22:49
ZaurenZauren 24 Oct 2016 22:39
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2518

I don't understand the hate for this. +1 from me. The one thing I would expand on perhaps is why the D-class did not remove the santa outfit? Perhaps he didn't make the association? I think some fun could be had with a few interviews during the month. Maybe told the SCP would do bad things if he was naked, hahaha.

I suppose the main flaw is a lack of a hook. It's clear what it does, but there's not any clues about 'why'. I think the lack of 'why' is what is making it downvoted. Otherwise you could just put this into the bulk list of random SCP's that are safely contained as 'destroys Christmas-themed stuff once a year'. If you can't expand beyond that, then…

by ZaurenZauren, 24 Oct 2016 22:39

That's the one! Thanks.

Well now I'm embarrassed because it was even a heritage SCP :
MazedMazed 24 Oct 2016 22:26
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2610

While it might not be intentionally connected to 610 or Sarkicism, it falls into the same issue that so many of those other SPCs also have: The "horror" is over-the-top B-movie/FPS video game plot kind of stuff, liberally strewn with the author's off-the-cuff "what are the worst things ever ever?" subjects — wherein those "worst things" inevitably end up being the exact same luridities that get bludgeoned around in equally cheap fiction. Cannibalism, check, rape, check, body horror, check, season with a generous dollop of religious-themed craziness, serve with the most blatantly unsubtle redactions this side of 231.

My vote's a neutral one. This isn't an invalid way to write horror, and the Sarkic-flavored business (intentionally invoked or not) remains fun to read, but it's ultimately pretty shallow.

I'll also readily admit that reading a comment beforehand that suggested the entity behind 093 might actually have been pulling the strings here tilts things slightly more in my favor.

by MazedMazed, 24 Oct 2016 22:26

Right-o, if anything my biggest worry is that this will turn into "SCP REFERENCES THE SKIP" given all that I'd mentioned.

Something like that might might might need a tid of reformatting…but I guess I need to familiarize myself with formatting more anyway, so hey, two birds.


++Edit: Okay, changed the final bit pertaining to SCP-x-3. Hopefully that's at the very least a start to what needs to be done. May fool around with this a little more, see if I can't maybe find a reason to focus more on x-2 and x-1. See if this doesn't get more critiques so I can hop on any other smaller nits I'd need to pick.

I really like this one. Simple and effective. I also love the idea of a frustrated researcher having to wait a whole year to do *his* test.


by WerylliumWeryllium, 24 Oct 2016 22:21
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