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My Foundation is one that got a reality check some time in the recent past. They realized that they can't just keep containing anomalies, and that they're not learning from them with current practices. They've also learned that, sometimes, containment isn't the best option. They're not going to destroy everything, but when it comes to something like a reality bender, it's better to study them on an autopsy table.

So, they've upped their game: more rigorous testing, experimental procedures that wouldn't make any first grader with knowledge of the scientific method cringe1 and most importantly, more results. Vaccines for anomalous diseases were developed and covertly distributed, the Scranton Reality Anchor project finally got funding2, and a program dedicated to prolonging human life while maintaining biological viability was started. Overall, a greater effort to understand and use the anomalous (or perhaps, the no-longer-anomalous) was made.

There were roadblocks here and there, of course. Some of the older crowd stonewalled these ideas, afraid that they would lose their jobs if the anomalous became known, or that far worse consequences could result from messing with the laws of physics in ways we didn't fully understand. Others, still sore from General Adolf Stan Bowe's Omega 7 snafu, were afraid that the Foundation would once again attempt to use anomalous personnel, passing them off as being 'understood'.

There's still a lot my Foundation doesn't understand, of course. But, mine's more optimistic than most. They don't want mankind to go back to living in fear, and what is fear if not just an irrational emotion directed at the unknown, the other, the thing that goes bump in the night? The Foundation wants to assure the world at large (and themselves) that the thing that went bump is explainable.

So, yeah, a tad optimistic, but that's me. Sometimes.

Please read the guides on writing humanoids. They'll tell you why this isn't good.

by ThekilleraxThekillerax, 02 Sep 2014 03:57
TayJKTayJK 02 Sep 2014 03:46
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2203

Sounds like one of the guys that would have been on Able's old MTF. That is not a good thing. Most of those Mary Sues were wiped out back in the Mass Edit.

by TayJKTayJK, 02 Sep 2014 03:46
by Darman8015Darman8015, 02 Sep 2014 03:43

As was said earlier, what is there to test? Does he prefer to break people's necks from the right? Or the left? Does he break in-animate things?

SCP-173 is a classic. It shouldn't be changed, and it won't. I don't see any more supplementary work being added, unless it's in the form of tales.

Re: SCP-173 Test log by trettertretter, 02 Sep 2014 03:39

This is too short to be very good. There's nothing wrong with silliness and randomness. They have their place on the site too, but there still needs to be something tying it all together. Expand on this. Build a world around this idea and show us it in motion, rather than giving us a snapshot.

by BryxBryx, 02 Sep 2014 03:38
dankaardankaar 02 Sep 2014 03:38
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2203

SCP-2203 is to be given whatever he wants as long as it won't be a threat to security as he has helped the foundation during a containment breach.

And that's all I needed to read before down voting. We to not give SCPs whatever they want, even if they helped the Foundation beforehand. The Foundation is a prison, not a five-star Hotel.

Additionally, where's the Item # and Object Class headings? Breaking format there…

by dankaardankaar, 02 Sep 2014 03:38
BryxBryx 02 Sep 2014 03:35
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2203

This is… everything that is done wrong with humanoid SCP's done all at once. I'm sorry, but you couldn't have written a more textbook example if you were deliberately trying to, and I very much hope you weren't.

Your profile says you've been a member of this site for nearly a year. Even if this is your first try at writing an article, you should have a grip on the basics by now. Please, read the guides and make a sandbox. Take your drafts to the forums first.

by BryxBryx, 02 Sep 2014 03:35

Fixed your formatting for you.

That said, this is…bad. A really awful super-kid who, in addition to having anything it wants (The Foundation is not a hotel; we don't give anomalies what they want), it goes and saves all the personnel from a pointless 682 crossover. Like Gaffney said, read the humanoid-writing essay again. I don't see any way this article can be saved, to be frank.

by OZ OuroborosOZ Ouroboros, 02 Sep 2014 03:32
GaffneyGaffney 02 Sep 2014 03:27
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2203

This has advice on things like writing a humanoid and doing basic formatting. It is required reading. Re-read it.

There is a reason that you don't see many Awesome Marty Stu's Who Seduce Iris And Kill 682 With Their Wicked Nunchuk Skillz on this site. The reason is not "you're the first person to think this is a good idea."

Burn this idea to ashes, then burn the ashes. Then go back to the drawing board.

by GaffneyGaffney, 02 Sep 2014 03:27

I see my Foundation as a regretful organization. They don't want to have to contain everything, and some of the things they have to contain would be of great use to humanity. But, as per their modus operandi, they must maintain normalcy. I feel that all the great and memorable doctors and agents are all real, but not entirely. They do not live forever or have special powers, but the names are passed down to various staff members who fit the characters. Each person who takes a famous doctor's moniker adds a little bit to the character, enough to make it their own, yet different enough to identify them. Other than that, it's rather quiet in all the sites. They know what they're doing, and they do it well. All those tales about containment breaches are just site-to-site rumours. Like a story spread around a common office environment, being embellished with each telling.

My Foundation is understaffed, but no more than any other company claims to be. They are aware of all the workings of the world, and occasionally help in them if there is a possibility that the veil they have created may be shaken. They see the GOIs of the world as almost pitiable, as the Foundation has quite a bit more knowledge on the workings of the paranormal than most of the other GOIs. The only GOI that really makes them nervous is Nobody because he's a wild card. They don't know who or what he is. They don't know his motives or morals. They have plenty of moles and spies in the other GOIs and often use these resources to keep the GOIs from causing too much trouble.

The general atmosphere of the Foundation is relaxed, but prepared to deal with any threat. They like to have all the cards in their hand, but sometimes having those cards mean more people get hurt than would normally. But they're willing to let a few people die to protect the masquerade they've set up.

Point taken, reading over it now makes me realise how bad it is. I apologise to the world for this monstrosity. The more I read over this draft and post, the stupider I feel. I'm a disgrace to authors. I will try to redeem myself, wish me luck, as my reputation as at sake.

Re: SCP Draft: The Queen by Leogod13Leogod13, 02 Sep 2014 03:26

What is there TO test? Not a lot of unknowns to its abilities that need to be explored. Maybe if it is being filmed, but with the test results not varying that much from 'neck broken,' 'no movement' with a possible [DATA EXPUNGED], not a lot of meat for a test log.

Re: SCP-173 Test log by TayJKTayJK, 02 Sep 2014 03:24

This is really bad.

There's already an object, the number of which escapes me at the moment, that changes the biological sex of an individual. This is just that but with overly detailed explanations of how womens' bodies tend to differ from those of men.

It is in this phase where SCP-XXXX-A loses their manhood.
These changes include becoming more emotional, more sensitive about their looks, less attracted to women and more attracted to men and begin wearing women's clothing and makeup.

Even assuming that this wasn't half retrograde stereotyping (which it is), the fact is that "becoming a woman" is different from "becoming what Western society has determined a woman is." There might be something worth exploring in that idea, but this article settles for the phenomenally dumb idea of "what if there were a thing that could make u a chick?"

I got about two lines into the interview log before I quit. The dialogue was atrocious.

Re: SCP Draft: The Queen by GaffneyGaffney, 02 Sep 2014 03:23

Incorrect formatting: title is wrong, appropriate text not emboldened, no rating module (I will add one momentarily so that I may use it), SCP-2203 is written as SCP 2203.

As for the content, he's an overpowered X-Man type. His name is Justin. I wonder what the author's name is.

It is clear you read no guides and got no feed back. You should have done both. -1

Edit: I added the rating module. I chose not to fix the formatting errors as I personally believe they are evidence of the limited effort, time, and attention put into this article and I believe they speak to the quality of your performance.

by CirclesAndSquaresCirclesAndSquares, 02 Sep 2014 03:21

Of course we all know SCP-173 is the best, but it's just too short of a read! I don't know if this has been proposed before, but I want to get some opinions on the creation of a test log for SCP-173. I figure this would be best left up to a more experienced member should it be agreed upon.

SCP-173 Test log by TwigworthTwigworth, 02 Sep 2014 03:13
Re: My Foundation by Agent MacLeodAgent MacLeod, 02 Sep 2014 03:12

I like it! Seems original and unique. I agree with what Accelerando said, but perhaps there could also be a punishment chosen by the winner for the loser? I don't know if you want this to be a "happier" SCP but it's just a thought.

Re: Capsule Machine by TwigworthTwigworth, 02 Sep 2014 03:02

Please explain.

by ZynZyn, 02 Sep 2014 02:52

Can you please read this draft and tell me what you think? It's not complete yet, but if you like it I will continue it. Be as harsh as you need, tell me exactly what you think.

I have deleted this draft, as it is really bad. Can an administrator please remove this post?

SCP Draft: The Queen by Leogod13Leogod13, 02 Sep 2014 02:41
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