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by ScantronScantron, 27 May 2015 21:23

A SCP isn't just a catalogue of monsters and creepy stuff, though it presents itself as such in-universe. Each SCP needs to be interesting to survive, and interest is most easily garnered by telling a story.

What you have is known as a generic monster. It has hands instead of legs and… well, thats the most interesting thing about it. In the same way a patch of rusted metal is interesting because it kinda looks like Elvis. Yeah, that's neat, but it's not going to be saved from getting tossed in a trash can.

So, how can you save this from getting trashed? You need to attach a story to it. And when I say "story", I don't mean a description of its feeding habits or why the Foundation needs to contain it. I mean, like the love story seen here. Give us a reason to care about this SCP, more than just "because it'll nom your face off".


Some of the writing could be cleaned up a bit, but I found it effective.

by thedeadlymoosethedeadlymoose, 27 May 2015 21:20

I can't make out your drawing, but it looks like a giant spider. What does it do other than exist?

Did you post this as a draft on the forums or in the chat? Any objectively "bad writing" that can be identified would have been brought to your attention in a critique. I also suggest reading some guides related to tone/style.

Aside from that, the "person in a position of power is actually crazy because reasons" thing has been done before, and I can't see anything that makes this stand out. That and a completely random and unnecessary self-insert get a -1 from me.

by MrAnakinSpecterMrAnakinSpecter, 27 May 2015 21:06
dankaardankaar 27 May 2015 21:06
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » Journals

They actually let me in? Me? A person who is barely sane? I don't understand. Medical evaluations, background checks, bloody exams.

And that's basically when I downvoted, especially when it became clear he was joining the Foundation. The Foundation is incredibly unlikely to make this mistake. And it would quickly become clear that a mistake was made if they did, since high stress jobs are most likely going to exacerbate any existing mental health issues.

Overall, this is a rambling article without much of a plot, and I'm not given any good reason to care about the presumed owner of the journal.

by dankaardankaar, 27 May 2015 21:06

I need more SCPs that start as Keter and end as Safe. Also, Triple Threat would be a indie hipster's wetdream.

by Flying SpidersnakeFlying Spidersnake, 27 May 2015 21:05
iaveviavev 27 May 2015 20:55
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2775

Spot the difference.

Смыть. Прочесть. Повторить.

by iaveviavev, 27 May 2015 20:55

I like it. I like the adenda, even. I love haunted houses so if it's cliche it doesn't bother me much. It's creepy, it's well written, and I liked the bit at the end that almost got away for a minute.

by Gabriel OffuttGabriel Offutt, 27 May 2015 20:52
dankaardankaar 27 May 2015 20:51
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2631

That's actually a good point.

In fact many ametur astronomers with half-decent equipment should be able to see these things unless the surface of the sattelites have a refractory index that is low enough to match "empty" space. That wouldn't make them black: it would make them the blackest objects ever seen. It wouldn'tt help when the objects occult (pass over) stars (making them dissapear for a brief moment). Anyone who is really interested in the phenomenon should quickly discover at least one of them since a geosynchronous orbit is incredibly predictable.

And that's assuming simple optical telescopes will be used. An observatory can have non-optical technology, and if they spot one of those suckers, they'll start spreading the word. Nothing sets an astronomer's fire like a newly-discovered stellar phenomenon. Every time an asteroid flings by or a predicted impact on the moon or another planet, chances are that every telescope in the world that can physically see it will be looking at it.

by dankaardankaar, 27 May 2015 20:51

I want to see the transcript of the memo sent to NASA explaining this is a weather satellite.

by Gabriel OffuttGabriel Offutt, 27 May 2015 20:42

This is my first SCP. I have made my worst mistake with this project, and it was changing the original idea. Since I will return it back to the original idea, I hope that it goes alright.

Here's my sketching of the SCP: 65079bc4c105a7b9fce0ed360052217f

The whole premise: It is a giant insect-like monster, which has six humanoid arms and hands, and possesses a human right hand as a head. It's a carnivore, and eats by grabbing its prey with its head, then starts eating because its mouth is close enough to bite.

Any ideas?

If there is anything that's more nightmare fuel than my profile pic…
It's the paper falcon head I tried to create in my seventh grade year.

No, I just codenamed the whole idea 'Gropesnatcher'.

Before I thought of the story, (when I first drew the sketch), it was originally intended to grope you and then snatch you.

I have finally decided to make this the original idea: It's a carnivore, but since its head is a hand, it will grab its prey with its head, and munch on the prey since it has a mouth.

That was the original idea, but I read how 'gore for the sake of gore is stupid' so…

If there is anything that's more nightmare fuel than my profile pic…
It's the paper falcon head I tried to create in my seventh grade year.

Re: Review my SCP? by GroominGabeGroominGabe, 27 May 2015 20:30
dankaardankaar 27 May 2015 20:24
in discussion Per Page Discussions / Per page discussions » SCP-2196

In the event of containment breach caused by more dangerous SCP objects that require firearms to subdue. Personnel are to use high pressure hoses to temporarily stun all active instances of SCP -2196

Better idea: why not store them at a site specially built to contain these clay pidgeons? The result is a minimal risk of both containment breaches and containment personnel getting clawed to death.

by dankaardankaar, 27 May 2015 20:24

Please excuse any bad writing, I'm really tired right now.

by Capt MillerCapt Miller, 27 May 2015 20:22

The mathematics brought me in, but the email pushed me back out. Mysterious groups vaguely opposing the Foundation are boring.

by Flying SpidersnakeFlying Spidersnake, 27 May 2015 20:20

I thought this would be based on one of the apocryphal miracles of Jesus from the Infancy Gospel of Thomas and the Koran where he makes clay birds come to life.

Permission to rewrite?

by GuillimanGuilliman, 27 May 2015 20:17

Too short for my tastes. No experiments. Also I like the other Russian nesting doll better - the one that never finishes being dissassembled.

by DanThePlanManDanThePlanMan, 27 May 2015 20:14

What did I just read? (I need to take it easy on these SCP files.)

by CW HargravesCW Hargraves, 27 May 2015 20:00

Maybe it was a thing a year or so ago, but having every researcher armed, down to that grad school initiate who cleans the glassware, seems ridiculous. Would also be a safety hazard in the sites that don't house anything that would necessitate a weapon to contain.

Keep in mind that while Keter things do exist, the majority of the research personnel are employed for science-y things, not security things. The security teams are trained and have professional experience in the field and in emergency scenarios that regular researchers wouldn't need upon being hired.

Re: Foundation Equipment by ZynZyn, 27 May 2015 19:36
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