Yeah, I can see where the grammar and flow needs some work. Thanks for that.
Firstly though, I use XXXX for placeholder to the SCP number. Doesn't make sense to number it in draft phase.
I will try to answer some concerns that don't adress spelling and grammar.
What kind of bag? How big? What material?
Does not really matter, as long as you can not see the contents of said bag. Opaque is the only quality it's required to have. Put it in a garbage bin liner or a paper bag just big enough to cover it… As it says later on, for temporary recontainment you could even wrap it up in a shirt.
Just describe the anomalous property; including the discovery midway through an article really breaks up the flow.
That is, unfortunately, a side-effect of a previously suggested edit of an older draft. It was suggested to flow better if that whole block was just moved over.
'Invariably, this will effectively terminate anyone it is applied to.'
Although this is a grammar thing, I am curious if this carried over the lampshading I intended on how most legends say you need to kill a vampire permanently.
I mean, apart from sunlight -which is a method that won't be used by the victims- most legends tell to:
- Cut off head and stuff mouth with garlic or silver coins.
- Completely dismember and bury parts in different graves.
- Stake through the heart.
Which really just about kills anyone. But hey, if they stay dead, they MUST have been a vampire, right?
Does this mean that SCP-xxxx-1 was carrying the notebook around with them all the time? It would make sense, really; one must always be prepared to kill a vampire.
It means that SCP-xxxx-1 would keep the item handily accessible. Either by carrying it around or in a desk drawer they're near most of the day. Or when more sedentary and prone to stay at home: lying around on their coffeetable.
What do you mean by this? Does SCP-xxxx-1 completely forget about SCP-xxxx, or does it just not care?
They simply do not seem to care where they leave it. The compulsion is satisfied as long as it's left somewhere with a high chance of new people passing by to pick it up. They don't completely forget about it, though. The idea or suggestion was that the statement to a lawyer, a doctor or even in court of a victim of the SCP that they had absolute proof in a fictional characters diary for why they murdered someone would've tipped off the Foundation.
Anyway. Massive thanks with the grammar look-over.
I'm going to return to the cutting board and next time hope to have a real proper first actual posting.