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Author, I can give you a much more in-depth critique if you would like, but there's two main problems I felt were present when skimming your draft -

1. PTSD has to be handled with care. 5.2 million Americans alone are diagnosed with it every year, alongside its 'cousin' mental illness, BPD, which is more likely to be diagnosed in women. As someone who has both, I'll be more than happy to look at your draft and try and pick out the parts that people may feel offended by, because you have to be so careful with real life issues.

2. As Sirpudding already said, what you're describing here is less anomalous, and more like the 1980s Satanic ritual abuse, where children were effectively induced with memories they never really had, and that carried on to adults getting the same treatment, and remembering stuff that happened in their childhood that never actually happened.

Like I said, as both someone who gives critique and someone with PTSD, I'm happy to give you more in-depth feedback, but maybe you want to do some background reading on the real life situation first to see if what you're describing is anomalous or just a different way to showcase PTSD and repressed memories.

Re: PTSD SCP by Zachary MaxwellZachary Maxwell, 27 May 2017 04:16

This sounds like the start of something cool. Quick spitball: what if your person was the first one touched by this outer force; the only one thus far not to turn into meat-horror but is also acting as a transmitter?

Re: SCP: We Can Fix You by PsyshadePsyshade, 27 May 2017 04:11

I upvoted because it's was a really good coolpage funpage!

by pastarasta1pastarasta1, 27 May 2017 04:05

Now, I came up with the following idea - an SCP with 2 or 3 parts with different effects, with one of them having a catastrophic effect. The 1 or 2 other(s) have to give their best to keep it away from using these powers. But once the Foundation captures them the 1 (or 2) can't continue their work from their cells. And it's still kinda open ended…

I currently have a semi-done Draft, but I would like to hear about the idea and how to improve it. I will edit stuff in and out if I have to.

http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/foldingpapers

P.S. I know execution isn't the best, but Drafts and Critiques is the place I'll search for more detailed feedback. Here I wanna hear abut the idea. Thank you in advance!

Idea Thingy by FoldingPapersFoldingPapers, 27 May 2017 04:03

Thank you for your feedback. It's much appreciated.

I admit that the last addendum is mostly fluff in comparison to the rest, but I personally enjoy everything being explained, or at least eventually figured out. What would you say to me moving it to the outdated file?

The SCP is melodramatic by design. Not only is it naturally mentally unstable, as evidenced by its writing without a host, but everything it does is to elicit an emotional response from humans, thus increasing its pool of possible hosts. That's why it's so open and revealing. The tiger thing is meant to make in-universe readers think about the SCP. Not much of a visual is actually given, just a comparison and to set up foreshadowing for the event with [DATA EXPUNGED]. The joke is made to add another layer of emotional connection, assuming anyone laughs at it. The SCP is still plenty imperceptible.

by bianhook55bianhook55, 27 May 2017 03:55

X-man skips rarely do well, I would run this through the forums before you post.

by ApollyonZApollyonZ, 27 May 2017 03:36

This SCP is just… so weird and totally off-the-wall. I really like the character of 3275-2 as well. +1 for sure

by CannedBreadCannedBread, 27 May 2017 03:31

Oats. This is a well written article. I'm the kind of horrible human that reads containment procedures last, so when the first host died, I was legitimately surprised. The twist was great, and sudden, and also backed up with reasoning later on, not to mention well timed/placed. I sympathize greatly with the scip (its characteriztion is done quite well, although it is a bit long winded and expository), and am both enthralled and horrified by its implications. It taking from the entertainment choice is a nice touch.

Criticism wise, I think that the last addendum can be excised. It serves worldbuilding purposes, yes, but is meaningless fluff to me. I'm also highly unused to a very open (and highly melodramatic) world ending entity, and surprisingly that is what stretches my suspension of belief the most (what dafuq? It's pretty weird to think about the implications of that.). When it calls itself a tiger, I couldn't stop thinking about this as a sapient Keter Chocolate Fountain. Although the tiger reference serves a purpose for the "tales" and a joke, I think that it unnecessary. It takes the unpercievable horror of the scip and gives us an enemy to imagine, where the biggest threat of this is that it cannot be percieved and it is more horrifying that we cannot find something tangible to hate and fear.

Bar those two, I think this is ready for the main list. I'd give it my up oat.

by TheLordSavantTheLordSavant, 27 May 2017 03:31

I suppose I shouldn't have been surprised to see comments that this seemed like Wondertainment for Grown-Ups, but honestly I had pictured the company as being more like MC&D for Teens.

by Jim NorthJim North, 27 May 2017 03:19

So, if you would like me to further expand on one or the other just ask and I shall answer.
Thank you for your time.

Re: Of the gods by Edward BuckEdward Buck, 27 May 2017 02:59

The title (and summary) of this thread is a bit of a melodramatic red herring. You'll see what I mean.

http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/thelordsavant

I'm ready for any and all criticisms and advice.

Major revisions all around. Added events and addenda, changed characters, altered concept and told what I believe to be a solid story. This SCP is finally complete. Just looking for feedback and criticisms to further refine it before trying to make it official.

Well then my bad, i felt as if you made me sound like i was stupid. i did reply to another comment talking about the invulnerability but i should've specified that; I'm sorry. i have multiple additions to add to this idea, i just posted this thread as a pre-pre-pre idea starter. wasn't close to done and i will probably change the level to Euclid, but i don't feel right classifying it as Safe simply because it isn't safe. There's so much work i need to do before i can officially say this is what i want to post on the website. Until then I'm most definitely open to suggestions or changes that could be recommended. Sorry and thank you; also sorry for being indirect.

Re: A Class-D Personnel SCP by LuraganLuragan, 27 May 2017 02:41

While trying to connect to site19, I got this message:

Closing Link: deku_link[(ID)] (User has been banned from synIRC (spamming))

I was spamming a Trump supporter channel on nixtrix irc a few days back, didn't know that was connected to synIRC when this happened, does anyone know if there's a way to lift the ban or am I gonna have to try to proxy my way around this one?

Banned from SynIRC by deku_linkdeku_link, 27 May 2017 02:41

Beginning deletion vote at -15.

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Staff Post - Deletion Vote by MrWrongMrWrong, 27 May 2017 02:40

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Staff Post - Deletion Vote by MrWrongMrWrong, 27 May 2017 02:39

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Staff Post - Deletion Vote by MrWrongMrWrong, 27 May 2017 02:37

Yeah, that was definitely a thought I had. Axed. Thanks!

Re: PTSD SCP by blarblarblarblar, 27 May 2017 02:23

This isn't really that anomalous (especially in the Foundation-verse where a strong memetic model is apparently valid), as this is basically where Satanic Ritual Abuse Syndrome came from. Humans can probably be induced to "recover" any memory you are able to imagine.

Re: PTSD SCP by sirpuddingsirpudding, 27 May 2017 02:23
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