I think Kroenecker's ghost is finally realizing that Cantor was right.
Ah, bonjour, Ahbonjour!
I also think it's funny. I do believe you should go crazy with this idea, perhaps… Take it slow at the start and then pretend to make it Keter or something. Could be a good SCP-J. Is this what you had in mind?
There's a place to test your abilities: the sandbox and the drafts forum. The mainlist is for finished, completed works that can stand on their own and don't require extensive editing. That said, I have to echo psul, in that this reads as pretty generic spookyplace with spookybeasts. Nothing is developed well enough to jump out and really create a sense of horror or fear and what is developed is done in such a way as to ruin any build up of fear and tension that might have occurred. Specifically, I refer to the 330-Eidolon procedure, which seems a clear riff on 110-Montauk, though it fails largely because it does what 110-Montauk doesn't: explain exactly what it is. Your reader's imagination is the best tool you have for breeding fear and paranoia, but it takes a lot of skill in order to point them down the path you want.
And ninthly, 'extreme prejudice' has no place in a clinical document. Unless there is a reason for the person doing the termination to actively hate the target, this is just melodramatic fluff.
I sang it. I laughed. I have no idea how well filk does as - Js though. Are there any?
As was previously stated, I can see a lot of potential with this idea. However, I don't think this is the best way to be taking it, so I am down voting.
Your sarcasm, it wounds me, madam. I shall go console myself with additional low class substitutes for whatever sophisticated people console themselves with. Good day!
(I really have opened a sparkling wine with an arming sword1, FWIW. I have also opened beers with the USMC NCO sword, but the technique is different.)
I've got random writings here and there. Many of them are related to RPGs, such as the Center for Al Amarjan Culture for Over The Edge (including the concept of the Plaza of Painted Rocks), the Unauthorized Biography of the Marquis Stezen D'Polarno for Ravenloft, or some of the Clan Giovanni newsletters for Vampire: The Eternal Struggle card game.
That's the old stuff. Late 90s old.
Then there are a couple of published Living Greyhawk adventures I wrote: "Never Mined" and "The Tomb of Tloques-Popolocas". I ran a Ravenloft adventure over the course of a couple years on EN World, and I really enjoyed how that turned out.
More recently, I wrote a couple chapters describing a steampunk post-apoc world I called The Walking Valley. I didn't take it anywhere, but I suppose I still could.
There's also a fractured fairy tale about how Olivia got her name, on a baby names website.
I'll add links for what I can if anyone's interested.
I want to like this but I can't. Particularly:
- Technobabble in the containment procedures is a big pet peeve of mine. I don't find it plausible that the Foundation has this useful ultra-tech, keeps it secret, and only uses it here (it's even "standard issue" technobabble here, if it is standard issue why isn't it used everywhere it would make sense?).
- The final payoff of the communication with the entity is such a cliche letdown.
I agree completely.
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That would be interesting.
Think about the news articles…
"Scientists found a new application for Labseors!"
I am sorry. Can I rewrite this SCP?
Sabering champagne (also called sabrage) isn't a necessary part for the Master of Wine, but you do need a comprehensive knowledge of varietals, winemaking, pairing, and basically anything wine.
(and the technique involves a swift strike in an upward motion at the base of the head of the bottle, breaking the lip off)
I quite like this one. The idea is pretty interesting, but you should certainly take drafts into the chat to get feedback. Upvoting to stave off deletion.
You missed an "SCP-XXXX" in the picture description.
Tone is excellent throughout and the concept was good, but I too was a bit disappointed that it turned out to be a man in the rock, particularly the "they're coming! You can't run!" sort of dialogue in the interview. Not sure why he would go to all the bother, or even if he could. Surely just hiding in a big rock would do it?
No vote, although I do see you've put a great deal of effort into this.
You're only as good - or as bad - as your last skip.
What you write and what the audience reads is many times interpreted entirely differently. Just because it all makes sense from your perspective doesn't really mean I have the depth to make connections. Perhaps your approach needs to be better tempered without spoon-feeding the reader. It's a difficult balance.
Ohh I see.
I only know about Master of Wine because one day I watched a youtube video "how to" for sabering a champagne bottle, and the lady demonstrating how to use the sword/knife/blade was a Master of Wine.
Fair enough. I'm trying to start small as my first was an abject failure. Guess I should have heeded the site's warning about first time SCPs…
Anything else besides that? Is the writing at least passable?